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I'm chasing a demon through a series of alleyways, normally I wouldn't concern myself with such a small task but it’s in my ホーム town and I'm here to give it the welcome wagon. I hear a banging noise to my right. I whirl around, my wrist crossbow at the ready. I aim at a bin where the noise came from. After a few 秒 a small cat (or a very large rat) jumps out from the bin and scurries away. I lower my crossbow and laugh at my error. Bad move. I feel claws dig into my back and lift me into the air. The demon must have been watching from overhead, waiting for me to drop my guard. I try to wiggle free but the demon has a firm hold on me. I twist my arm around and 火災, 火 a bolt; with some luck it hits the demon in the arm and it drops me. I fall and hit the ground hard. I'm quickly back on my feet, but the demons quicker. It hits me with its tail and sends me crashing into the side of a building. I fight the pain and アヒル, 鴨 as the demon swings its tail again. As I come up I 火災, 火 another bolt at the demon and it strikes it in the face. It cries out in pain as it tries to pull it out. The 秒 bolt isn’t as powerful as the first, so the demon doesn’t die, but it buys me time. I pull a small ナイフ out of my コート pocket and throw it at the demon. It strikes it and burry’s itself in its chest. The demon finally gets the bolt out of its face, but it's already too late. As the demon readies itself to attack again I wave my hand and the ナイフ explodes, destroying the demon.
 killer22 posted 1年以上前
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adamk said:
This is pretty good, I'm curious about the lead
character and why he または she hunts demons. I'll look for part 2. :)
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killer22 posted 1年以上前
azkaban said:
I would read it, but I really don't have the attention span for that at the moment. Sorry.
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Ok. I forced myself to read until the end. ;) It's good. I'm interested in the fact that the main character (a he?) can make a ナイフ explode with a wave of his hand.
azkaban posted 1年以上前
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killer22 posted 1年以上前
Moonlight_Kitty said:
Sounds interesting. I would like to read some more. I'll keep my eyes open.
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killer22 posted 1年以上前
2dolphn97 said:
Cool story bro. lol あなた see what I did there? YeH but it seemed extremely interesting... I would read it :)
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Thanks
killer22 posted 1年以上前
Sutelc22 said:
very creative.good goin kid!
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