I need help to see if it's a good story line または not because i dont like my writing!

I like it, BUT I think there is already so much like it. あなた will have to make it extremely unique. Maybe add some sort of secret twist または something. アップロード and I'll read it. Best of luck!

I think it's good even if ヴァンパイア are a little overdone right now.
There are just a few things you'd have to make really clear like why she has to get used to blood at all and why she isn't evil like other vampires. Whether あなた have your own myths または not I wouldn't like it if it wasn't explained.
Also why one vampire would betray another is important to explain as well.
But I think as long as あなた covered those, I like the idea of a somewhat rogue vigilante vampire.

I like it. But maybe Rose should start out as human. And then the ヴァンパイア turn her vampire in an attempt to kill her. That way not only is she hunting for her werewolf love, but for her human life. It adds girl strength to the story, not just vengance for an ex lover. But either way あなた decide to go with it, let me know when its up. I'd 愛 to read it.

It sounds really cool and i would luv to read it but it sounds like あなた got the ideas from other books/shows.