I need some serious help!

Ok so I am going to try and answer this as best i can (its a hard Q.)....

So usually in 書く levels connect, something that happens seemingly meaningless at the start of the story comes back at the end または middle. If あなた try and find the layers that connect あなた can cut them (2 または more) out without rupturing the story line.

Planning might also help. If あなた plan the layers at the start then あなた don't get the end and have to (try) cut something out. If あなた plan the layers at the beginning then あなた also don't have the chance of adding もっと見る in from the original idea.

Hope this helps....

Hm, this is a complicated question, because あなた would go about it differently for each story. Since I don't know anything about your story, I can't give あなた specific examples.

Sit down and look at what あなた have, and I mean really look. Is there anything that doesn't add to the conflict, plot, または general story arc?

Also, talk to your teacher. See what he/she thinks is so complex about your stories. What he/she thinks maybe completely different from what あなた think.

youve got so much to say its almost bursting, the teacher doesnt want to be inthralled によって your stories; your good, but- teacher got to work on the other ロスト sheep,mmm simpler sucks,= that wouldnt sell! [and your in training!!!!!!!] will a note from Saint Nick help? id allow your 100 pages, the rest in colour ha he hi ho hu later;-}