xFluttershyx Great!

pikachu700 thx

Stegosaurus Good job!

flabaloobalah awesome. you should continue it.

pikachu700 im awesome at this

btflash Cilan, the young connoisseur from the Pokemon Anime, steps into the spotlight and spreads his arms. "It's Evaluating ti-." he begins to say before being rudely shoved out of the way by an even younger teenage boy with a buzz cut. This young boy speaks with a surprisingly deep voice. "Yes, Cilan, it is 'evaluating time.' However, i'm afraid it won't be as kind as any of your 'evaluations,' so maybe you should step off for a second and let me talk." "As for you, pikachu, as far as I've seen from the two chapters of this little "fanfiction" you've written, I can only say one thing." As he talks, the young unnamed boy begins to pace back and forth. He then stops, spreads his arms, and says "I've read cupcakes, and that was a fairly-written fanfiction, but the Writing Quality of this fanfiction pales in comparison to even [B]Sweet Apple Massacre[/B]," As he continues, he begins to pace once more. "and let me tell you that was a poorly-written piece for such an original idea. I will say the same for this. Such an original idea. A human captured and almost killed by Pinkamena Diane Pie from 'cupcakes'? Sounds like a great idea. However, the idea was poorly executed, and your grammar, for a lack of a better word, is terrible. I've made some corrections to people over the past few weeks, a few I'm not entirely proud of, but I will stray over to my dark side to say this." The young boy stops pacing and faces the viewer (assuming that is you). "You are either a troll, who likes watching people squirm over something you make that is obviously hated, or you really are a naive 10 year old boy that can't write worth anything." The still-unnamed boy puts his arms into the air in apology. "I'm sorry for everyone that finds what I'm saying to be mean or rude, but I will stand by it." He then begins to pace once more. "I have also been looking at your history, mister pikachu, and other people seem to have been complaining about the same thing. As far as I've bothered to look, you have been posting Pony Material on the 'Random' Club on fanpop, and people have been complaining about your poor grammar as well." "I do ask you this. Do you really take joy in this? Or are you really some naive kid?" As the boy, whom we can now recognize as btflash, finishes his little rant, he walks off of the stage. Now [B]That[/B] is how you write at least a semi-decent fanfiction, if I do say so myself.