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こんにちは do あなた like this poem i did about alice and jasper's love?

these two were insepreable
the trust and 愛 in his eyes
made her feel 安全, 安全です
when she smiled
it brightened his 日
the thrill of the adventure
the adventure of 愛
was making alice and jasper
fall ever so passionetly inlove
愛 is like the wind
あなた cant see it
but あなた can feel it
愛 folowed jasper and alice
because they were destined for eachother

 twilight_lover9 posted １年以上前
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TEAM-EDWARDxxx said:
I Like it...

But is okay i guess.. maybe sum もっと見る stuff bout like ヴァンパイア haha that would be interesting..
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posted １年以上前 
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あなた could just go to the request a peom 質問 and say that u kno! but thanx! for the tip
twilight_lover9 posted １年以上前
Little_Cullen said:
愛 it. Punctuation a bit funny, but the actual 書く is really cool. I especially like the bit about he makes her feel 安全, 安全です and her smile brightens his day. I 愛 it. Keep it up!
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posted １年以上前 
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thank-u so much
twilight_lover9 posted １年以上前
twilightgirlNo1 said:
i think its great but some of the lines could be a little better.
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posted １年以上前 
twilight0girl said:
it's a perfect poem about them.
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it's a perfect poem about them.
posted １年以上前 
Twilightpup said:
Its really good , あなた should make one about Bella and Edward
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posted １年以上前 
emilyemmett said:
That is really good!! あなた should write another one!! Maybe about the meadow または Jacob and Renesmee または something!
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posted １年以上前 
sessa123 said:
Its not bad, i always thought a poem used to jus have to rhyme but narr its really gud maybe fix up some little thing and maybe have a good thing to rhyme bout, like werewolves, ヴァンパイア anything lol KEEP IT UP HUN XX
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posted １年以上前 
zXwolfgirlXz said:
aww i like it

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posted １年以上前 
Brysis said:
It´s cute ♥
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posted １年以上前 
LovelyDragon said:
Ya, I like it. Some of the lines could be a little better, but it's really cool. :)
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posted １年以上前 
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