I agree with the Max X guy, あなた have something but it needs some work. probly try not to sound exactly like the who ever your trying to sing and control your voice, あなた sound like your trying to hard
Honestly, not bad... Could use a lot of work, but still not horrible または anything. I think あなた should try to put もっと見る passion into it. Dont be afraid to SMILE, use your eyes to 表示する that あなた are actually FEELING the song and what it means.