My own little ファン fiction, takes place one week after they found Mimi and she lived, I'm only 13 so please give me critique :)

Mark

Mark hurried down the street, mumbling sorrys as he bumped shoulders with fellow bystanders. He clutched his camera to his stomach protectively. The Life Cafe was just around the block, he was almost there. He hastily turned a corner.
"Oh! I'm sorry!" A woman, maybe a few years younger than Mark, gushed; after the two crashed into eachother. Her cheeks were bright red from embarrassment. Mark recognized her from somewhere. Although he couldn't remember where.
"Oh...