音楽 Article: At the edge of Dawn-Lyrics to a song i wrote myself.

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At the edge of Dawn-Lyrics to a song i wrote myself.

posted by LeoValdez101

Walking down the pathway
Running towards the door,
its closed now----,
Listen to the Voices ,Calling to be heard agian,
Agian.

Pathway made of stone,
River full of Blood,
The Royal Throne,made of bone
Forest Full of darkness,
And above be the Starless----
Night!

(softer)
Can あなた hear the echoe ,of your footsteps on the Stone?
Can あなた hear the splatter,of your blood upon the Throne?

Can あなた hear the clash,of steel apon steel,can あなた haer the warcrys,of those on the battlefield?

Can あなた feel the darkness ,at the Edge of-_---_- Dawn---??

reneemonique, dia_alam and 1 other like this

cute20k Hey, this is really good. I think you have potential. I'm not very good at critiquing, but I could hang you over to the guys at songstuff. Songstuff is a site where musicians post their works. There's a forum for everything, from each instrument, to lyrics. I post a lot of my stuff there, and let them eat it up and see what they can get out of it. Most people on the site are very informed, so their critiquing is constructive. If you wanna get some responses from people who know what they're talking about, check out this site and post this. http://forums.songstuff.com/forum/13-lyrics-critique/

dia_alam it's really very nice ....................did u sing it..................i mean did u gave any music in it...................

LeoValdez101 ?? sry dia_alam what??

LeoValdez101 and thanks for the info cute20k!!

dia_alam means did u gave any music 2 it............means did u sing it by urself yet..........................

LeoValdez101 i just sing i cant write music with real notes and such lol

dia_alam ...................