Is this any good?

I wrote this song today. Is It good?

    Oh, do あなた know,
    I used to look up to you,
    I felt I had found someone,
    But I was mistaken,
    And did あなた know,
    If I could see あなた face to face,
    And I’d be speaking for the aliens,
    I’d tell you,
    I hate you!
    Don’t mind how あなた look,
    I know you’ve grown up,
    I hate you!
    You’re just scared of us,
    And if I told あなた the truth,
    I’d just call あなた a wimp,
    Are あなた afraid of me?
    I hate to put all the blame on you,
    But it really is your fault,
    You wanted to become a Hollywood star,
    If I could see あなた face to face,
    Here’s just what I would say,
    Why did あなた have to change?
    Why couldn’t あなた just stay?
    And I honestly wouldn’t cry,
    If I heard that あなた had just dropped dead,
    I hate you!
    You probably don’t even know,
    This song is for you,
    What’s the point of this song?
    I know あなた won’t listen,
    You’re an arrogant jerk,
    Thought あなた were an alien,
    I guess after all this time,
    You got your wish,
    You belong.

 misscrazel posted 1年以上前
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