Can I get an opinion on this?

It's the opening to a ファン fiction I'm rewriting and want to know what people think. This is a different approach then what I was originally going for so I'm conflicted xD Is it lame, flat, boring, does it make あなた want to keep reading? I need to know.

Here's the link: link
 Can I get an opinion on this?
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This 質問 isn't asking about the picture. Please click the link it will take あなた to the opening of a story. Read and review pweez, tinkx ^-^
sesshyswind posted 1年以上前
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Believe me I'd remove the pic if I could xD
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犬夜叉 回答

kittykayley said:
go for it once i diden't go to my cosins party and i regrted so take a chance

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posted 1年以上前 
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O_o? Um this was an answer to my 質問 right? An opinion please. I made an effort with it before, now I want to make sure this version is any good. Please be もっと見る specific and answer the 質問 above. *You'll get cake :D*
sesshyswind posted 1年以上前
jessikaKALIKO said:
I think its great あなた should go for it but the face kinda looks like a girl...lol it looks a little girly...no offence! plus the face shows some emotion and he rarley shows emotion! he usually has a blank face the emotions he shows is consern, angry, and well thats about it... im sure theres もっと見る but i cant rly think of it right now.....so if u can change the face that would be good but the body looks great!! :) i hope this dosent offend u in any way! <3 and correct me if im wrong cuz im not an expert in 犬夜叉 :) sry for my grammar and stuff!
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XD this 質問 wasn't about the picture, I didn't draw that. It's just some image I picked up on Google lol. I was asking about the ファン fiction in the link. the picture I just 投稿されました because I thought it looked cute and because I just like posting ランダム pictures with my questions. If you'd like could あなた ready the opening to me ファン fiction in the link? x}
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