Hi... STILL new here, and I have a creative 書く camp over summer, and I was wondering if this is a good poem.

Cursed によって Marrisa Richards

When あなた have been cursed, your life turns around. The skies tun gray and the 火災, 火 burns your soul.

No one can save あなた from this darkness
Except yourself

Run, hide, hurry! Save yourself and don't get damaged

They will come for あなた if あなた are weak
They will come for あなた if あなた are strong

It's not a dream; nothing's ever a dream

So wake up

Now before they come

Now, あなた have waited to long あなた must let the beast feed into your soul.

Thanks!!!!!! :D

(Yeah it Doesn't rhyme but that's because its a SONG and it sounds so much better sung then read :])


I don't want to be a burden
But I can feel my life is burning
Someone please put out the flames

I can't take the heat
I need a cold release
I'm begging, put me down

I can't take the feeling
It's もっと見る than I can handle
The flames too bright
Scorching my life
I need to feel nothing again

I try to grab the water
But color burns my eyes
I recede into the darkness
Where the pain isn't so high

I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

あなた try to help. To heal
But all who try must pay
The 火災, 火 throws あなた back
It owns me now
あなた run while あなた still can

Cause I'm trapped inside the blaze
I'm trapped inside the blaze

I can't take the feeling
It's もっと見る than I can handle
I choke on smokey air
I need to feel nothing again
But I will never get the privilege

I'm trapped inside the blaze (And I'll never get out)
I'm trapped inside the blaze
And I'll NEVER get out.