So I've been 書く this Soul Eater fanfic "The DSM?" for a while now and am looking for some もっと見る feedback...
Here's a basic summary/preview thing, let me know it you're interesting and if anyone wants, I'll post the chapter files here as well.
Thirteen years 前 Lord Death made a desicion that would impact not only his own life, but his son's as well.
He held out his hand to the children, bending down in an attempt to 表示する he meant them no harm.
"It's okay, I won't hurt you."
The young girl was the first to shakily stand and cautiously lay her hand on Lord Death's, appearing miniscule in comparison.
"There, you're safe, I promise."
Stein sat in his wheeled chair facing the young meister who stared at him blankly.
".. What?"
"You heard me Dawn, hit me. Let's see what's so special about you. あなた like any other kid to me! Prove to me あなた deserve the タイトル Lord Death gave you!!!"
His voice kept rising until the point where he was practically shouting at her, challenging her.
.....
"Uh Kid? あなた sure we should be doing this?" Dawn asked cautiously.
"Don't あなた want to figure out what they're up to?"
"Well.. sure but is hiding in Liz and Patty's closet really necessary?"
Kid raised an eyebrow. "Do あなた see anywhere else in the room we'd both fit?"
She pouted, huffing and crossing her arms. "Yeah... but I really don't like closets. Never the same since my own tried to bury me alive."
Kid tried to stifle his laugh but didn't do a well enough job at keeping Dawn from noticing.
"It's not funny reaper."
She playfully shoved his shoulder but instead succeeded in pushing him over, and as he instinctually reached for something to stop his fall he grabbed Dawn's wrist and pulled her down with him.
Not sure how to end that other than there so I don't make this too long.
I'll add もっと見る if people 表示する interest... または あなた can just go check out the story - "The DSM?" によって VioletDawn00 on Fanfiction.net, link below.
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Here's a basic summary/preview thing, let me know it you're interesting and if anyone wants, I'll post the chapter files here as well.
Thirteen years 前 Lord Death made a desicion that would impact not only his own life, but his son's as well.
He held out his hand to the children, bending down in an attempt to 表示する he meant them no harm.
"It's okay, I won't hurt you."
The young girl was the first to shakily stand and cautiously lay her hand on Lord Death's, appearing miniscule in comparison.
"There, you're safe, I promise."
Stein sat in his wheeled chair facing the young meister who stared at him blankly.
".. What?"
"You heard me Dawn, hit me. Let's see what's so special about you. あなた like any other kid to me! Prove to me あなた deserve the タイトル Lord Death gave you!!!"
His voice kept rising until the point where he was practically shouting at her, challenging her.
.....
"Uh Kid? あなた sure we should be doing this?" Dawn asked cautiously.
"Don't あなた want to figure out what they're up to?"
"Well.. sure but is hiding in Liz and Patty's closet really necessary?"
Kid raised an eyebrow. "Do あなた see anywhere else in the room we'd both fit?"
She pouted, huffing and crossing her arms. "Yeah... but I really don't like closets. Never the same since my own tried to bury me alive."
Kid tried to stifle his laugh but didn't do a well enough job at keeping Dawn from noticing.
"It's not funny reaper."
She playfully shoved his shoulder but instead succeeded in pushing him over, and as he instinctually reached for something to stop his fall he grabbed Dawn's wrist and pulled her down with him.
Not sure how to end that other than there so I don't make this too long.
I'll add もっと見る if people 表示する interest... または あなた can just go check out the story - "The DSM?" によって VioletDawn00 on Fanfiction.net, link below.
link
On the last part people died then came back then someone came to the window and stuff.
Mizomi:What is that thing
Patty:I THINK IT'S A MOUSE!!
Liz:It's so big to be a マウス I think it's a.....hmmmm.......OH I GOT IT!!IT A 羊 IT HAS TO BE A SHEEP!!
Yukuri:You guys are idiots it's just a short 15 年 old
ランダム person:I'M NOT SHORT!!!!
Yukuri:Put a 靴下 in it Fullmetal.
Mizomi:*shocked* ED あなた BUTT!!WHY THE HELL WOULD あなた COME HERE WITHOUT TELLING ANYONE
Kurumi:How did あなた know it was Ed?
Mizomi:He's the only one who have two metal limbs duh.
Kid:*says quietly* descusting dash...
Mizomi:what was that Kid?
Kid:DESCUSTING DASH YOUR NOT SYMMETRICAL!!
Ed:Huh?
Kid:*trys shoot Ed*
Ed:AHHH WHAT THE HELL!?
Maka/Soul:KID WHAT THE HELL?!
what will happen next,find out on part 3 coming soon =3=
Mizomi:What is that thing
Patty:I THINK IT'S A MOUSE!!
Liz:It's so big to be a マウス I think it's a.....hmmmm.......OH I GOT IT!!IT A 羊 IT HAS TO BE A SHEEP!!
Yukuri:You guys are idiots it's just a short 15 年 old
ランダム person:I'M NOT SHORT!!!!
Yukuri:Put a 靴下 in it Fullmetal.
Mizomi:*shocked* ED あなた BUTT!!WHY THE HELL WOULD あなた COME HERE WITHOUT TELLING ANYONE
Kurumi:How did あなた know it was Ed?
Mizomi:He's the only one who have two metal limbs duh.
Kid:*says quietly* descusting dash...
Mizomi:what was that Kid?
Kid:DESCUSTING DASH YOUR NOT SYMMETRICAL!!
Ed:Huh?
Kid:*trys shoot Ed*
Ed:AHHH WHAT THE HELL!?
Maka/Soul:KID WHAT THE HELL?!
what will happen next,find out on part 3 coming soon =3=