こんにちは あなた guys who like ヴァンパイア can あなた do me a favor???

I have the first chapter of a new possible story but I want to see if anybody is going to read it...
And I was wondering can あなた guys read it and tell me what あなた think in a コメント または email?
And I don't no the name yet so can あなた guys help out with that to? Its not very long または hard to read.Oh and I can give あなた a link to it.