I know Yumi I was only saying I wouldn't care if you did or didn't let me judge...

Soorrry it's taking so long...busy,.....

@Yumi where you on my account again? xD
And Anifreak I now you juging this time so do you mind if I submit in my story tomorrow?
I never noticed how busy was this week.

...Yea I didn't notice. XD
And gosh itachi hurry that story was dude friday. :/
But if AFF isn't here when you subumit in the story, then I'll just juge it.
Itachi I needs to be in no later than tomorrow.
One reason why the juging is a weekend long. :]

Written by: Me
Characters: From Naruto. Itachi And Little Sasuke.
Welp I'll give it a try.
There will be a few mistakes I didn't really read over it.

Sasuke: Hey...*walks in from being outside* your home.
Itachi: *Doing paper work from his job* ..*looks up* Oh.. yes I've been home for quite a while now.
Sasuke: Oh...well... um ..you wanna see this new justu I learned with Naruto.
Itachi: Not right now sasuke..I'm a bit busy...
Sasuke: You've alway been so busy..even when mother and father where alive.
Itachi: ...*smiles gets up and pokes sasuke in his forhead* I'm sorry Sasuke..tomorrow oka?
Sasuke: *sigh* oka..I guess. *goes to his room*
Itachi: *walks to his room and falls on the ground and coughs up blood*...sasuke..
~
*Months earlier*
Doctor: You've be diagnosed with are rare heart disease it's very untreatable ..well try to help you the best we can..
Itachi: ....*looks down.* mhmm..
Doctor: *walks away* ...he'll be dead with in a few months..
Nurse: ...I wonder whats gonna happen to his brother?
Doctor: I don't know.
~

Itachi: ..*slowly gets off the ground and holds onto the wall* ..I better clean that blood up..*gets a wet towel and scrubs the blood off the carpet*
Sasuke: ..*peeks at itachi* Hey what are you doing?
Itachi: *looks up* Oh nothing..I just wasted something.
Sasuke: Mhmm like what? *walks in the room*
Itachi. Um-
Sasuke: Itachi have you been drinking that red wine that dad was keeping under his bed when he was alive? Gosh itachi I know your older now but your not that old.
Itachi: *smiles* come here..
Sasuke: *smiles back, runs to him*
Itachi: *pokes him in the forehead.*
Sasuke: oww..-_- Itachi..*rubs his head*
Itachi: It's getting late Sasuke get to bed.
Sasuke: Why can't I say up?
Itachi: Because tomorrow me and your are gonna have a free day.
Sasuke: Free day?
Itachi: I'm not gonna go to work and your not gonna go to school it just gonna be me and you have fun oka? Haven't you wanted this?
Sasuke: Yes!! I can't wait itachi!! haha!!
Itachi: Well..go get some rest oka?
Sasuke: Oka!! *runs to his room*
Itachi: ..*looks down* I don't think that blood is gonna come up anymore than it already is.
*slowly gets up* *lays on his bed* *calls Kakaish*
Sasuke: ..*laying in bed* mhmm I wonder what where gonna do..I bet it'll be fun..*turns to his side* I'm happy I have itachi..
Kakaish: I see..well, he can say with Naruto, but I'll watch him and keep him safe for you.
Itachi: That'd be nice., I'll meet with you tomorrow he'll have this things with him, see ya then.
Kakaish: Oka.
Itachi: *hangs up throws phone beside him* *yawns* *streaches out on his bed* ..sasuke.
*Next Morning*
Itachi: *is coughing uo blood in his sink* ..*wips his mouth* I really..can't keep going on like this.
*phone rings*
*shows number* 405-245-6536
Itachi: Mhmm...hello?
Madara: Itachi...I herd from a little birdy you where gonna let sasuke say with the nine tails.
Itachi: Madara? What do you want?
Madara: Why not let Sasuke stay with me? *smoking a cigictate* he'd learn a lot, hehe he'd become a ture Uchiha.
Itachi: Listen stay away from sasuke..you hear me!
Madara: Wow itachi you sound a little angry..you know I couldn't come near the boy without your say so, what kind of man do you take me for?
Itachi: You come near him I'll kill you.
Madara: How could you say that knowing how Ill you are?*smirks*
Itachi: ..how did..
Madara: You really should start worrying more about your health itachi, I don't want you to die on me..cause that way who will protect you little brother sasuke from me?
Naruto? Kakaish? pshh...welp I have things to do see you soon. *hangs up*
Itachi: .....
Sasuke: ..*Just woke up, walks in itachi's room* Nii-san..*rubing his eyes* I'm hungry..
Itachi: ohh sasuke..your up..what do you want to eat..then?
Sasuke: mhmm...what do you want to eat?
Itachi: mhmm what about...some orange juice and pancakes?
Sasuke: :D Oka!
*They eat*
Sasuke: Hey itachi will you train me?
Itachi: train you? On a day like this?
Sasuke: Yes, that'd make me happy if you did.
Itachi: *scratches his head* umm..oka..
Sasuke: Yes! Come on!
Itachi: Oka. *walking to the training spot*
Sasuke: Hey itachi..go hard on me take no pitty.
Itachi: Are you sure?
Sasuke: Yes!
Itachi: Oka we're here, lets do it.
Sasuke: Awesome now I can show you that justu I learned with Naruto and Kakakish.
Itachi: *sharingan* Kool, you ready?
Sasuke: *sharingan* Heck yea, I've been waiting for this....
Itachi: ..alright *quickly throws shuriken at sasuke*
Sasuke: *blocks* *pops up behind him, fireball justu*
Itachi: *flys into black crows, and flys around sasuke*
Sasuke: dammit I'm already in genjustu...ugh..
Itachi: *flys together*
Sasuke: Itachi..? Itachi!!!...dammit itachi answer me!! *throws kunai knives*
Itachi: *hits itachi in the chest, itachi flys back and freezes.*
Sasuke: The flying hell?
Itachi: *pops up behind him and holds a kunai knive to his neck* What did I tell you about cursing..sasuke..?
Sasuke: Grr..shut up! *kness him in the leg*
Itachi: *time speeds up* *flys again into black crows*
Sasuke: shit...the hell...I haven't even learned genjustu yet..
Itachi: *1000 kunai knives flys at sasuke* I thought I said no cursing.
Sasuke: Ahh! *trys to doj them, gets hit in the leg* ...*falls to the ground* ow!!
Itachi: *everything freezes* mhpm...*stares at sasuke*..*heart starts to beat really fast*
Sasuke: *smirks* *flys up behind itachi and hit him in the stoach with chidori*
Itachi: ..*coughs up blood*...
Sasuke: Yes! I got him!
Itachi: *genjustu fads* ...*itachi falls to his knees*
Sasuke: Woah itachi! Did I win.
Itachi: *coughs up blood in his hands* *heart rate speeds up*
Sasuke: Um itachi did I hit you too hard?
Itachi: ...*looks up at sasuke* No..I'm oka. *smiles* *heart is still beating fast*
Sasuke: Do you need water? *goes to buy some*
Itachi: *trying to catch his breath*
Sasuke: *comes back and gives him the water* here..nii-san
Itachi: thank you sasuke. *drinks* *heart rate slows down*
Sasuke: Gosh itachi did I do that?
Itachi: No, I guess I kind of over did it, I'm king of tired thats all.
Sasuke: Oh oka..Hey! Did you see my move wasting it awesome?
Itachi: Yes it was I was very suprised you've gotten very stronger sasuke.
Sasuke: Really? Kool I'm gonna be as strong as you someday.
Itachi: I'm sure you will. *gets a text: Reads: I'll be around Naruto's later.*
...I guess I'll tell him.
Sasuke: Tell me what?
Itachi: Well sasuke..I'm going to be going away for ..um a very long time and..your gonna be staying with Naruto.
Sasuke: What??!! Where are you going and why?..
Itachi: Um on a misson, you can say I'll be with mom and dad.
Sasuke: ...what? How..why..please don't leave me itachi..*gets every teary eye'd* please..
Itachi: *sigh* I'm sorry sasuke..I don't really have a choice..
Sasuke:......itachi...*runs home*
Itachi:...sasuke!!*sigh* *runs after him*
Sasuke: *runs into itachi's room* ...ugh why!!! itachi..why do you have to leave me..*tear falls down his face* ...*looks around itachi room* ...*and sees bloody rags in his bath room*
....the hell?
Madara: *Walks in itachi's room* hello there..sasuke.
Sasuke: *jumps a bit* Madara...? Hi what are you doing here?
Madara: I can't drop by? Wow sasuke you have grow up I remember when you where just a little baby.
Itachi: *makes it home notices, door it wide open* sasuke? *runs inside looking for sasuke*
Madara: I see you herd about your brother yes?
Sasuke: Yea..*looks down* I have...
Madara: Well it's oka..sasuke..why don't you come live with me? *gets very close to sasuke*
Sasuke: Um well...
Itachi: *katon goukakyuu no jutsu at Madara*
Madara: *absorbs all the fire* Well if it isn't Itachi..who do you feel?
Itachi: What the hell are you doing here?
Madara: Don't get to angry itachi, even if I would have asked to come over you would have just told me no. So I came anyway.
I only wanted to see sasuke, I didn't mean to cause any harm.
I guess I'll be leaving now?
Itachi: Get out.
Madara: My pleasure. *disappears*
Itachi: Are you oka sasuke?
Sasuke: ..yes..
Itachi: Good. *pats him on the head* go get packed oka?
Sasuke: Itachi I don't want you to leave.
Itachi: I'm sorry sasuke that's the way it has to be, but I'll always be with you oka?
Sasuke: Oka..I guess..*hugs itachi* I guess I'll go get packed. *leaves*
Itachi: *looks at the bloody rags on the sink* I really shoud have cleaned up....
*reaches to grab the bloody rags but misses* My..vision ....*looks at his hands* ...
Sasuke: I'm done..
Itachi: *turns around* Oh..good...well you ready?
Sasuke: Yea...
Itachi: Oka lets go.
*walkin to Naruto's house*
Sasuke: Itachi..I love you..your one of the best big brothers a boy could have..
Itachi: *smiles* Really? I'm very happy to hear that, I love you too.
Kakaish: Oh I see y'all have made it. Hey Sasuke how are you?
Sasuke: I'm good...
Itachi: *feels his hear rate increasing* ...damn it..at a time like this.
Kakaish: Well put your things inside oka?
Sasuke: Oka..*walks in*
Naruto: Sasuke!!
Sasuke: *smiles*
Kakaish: So this is it itachi?
Itachi: I believe so..
Kakaish: well it was nice meeting you itachi your a really unique fellow.
Itachi: Thank you, *loos at sasuke walking out from inside*
Sasuke: ...*walks by itachi*
Naruto: *is peeking from the door*
Kakaish* looks back at Naruto, and walks towards him* Come on Naruto, lets finish cleaning up your dirty room.
Naruto: UGHH WHYY KAKAISH! *Closes door*
Itachi: *looks at sasuke* well sasuke...I have to go now, be good for me sasuke..and become a fine shinobi.*hugs hime*
Sasuke: ...*tears fall form his face* I will..
Itachi: Well before I go I want you to have this, *gives him his necklance*
Sasuke: Really wow..thanks. *smiles*
Itachi: And one more thing, *gives him a piece of floded up paper* I will always be there oka when you need me, and you'll know the truth.
Sasuke: Be where? what truth?
Itachi: Read the note later oka?
Sasuke: grr... why not now.
Itachi: *pokes sasuke in the forehead* Cause I said so. *smiles*
Sasuke: Ugh oka!
Itachi: Well this is farewell sasuke...
Sasuke: ....goodbye...
Itachi: Bye-bye..*walks off, one bloody tear falls down his face*
Sasuke: ...Itachi..
*Months later*
Naruto: Hey Sasuke Sakura is coming over later!
Sasuke: Really? Kool.. *a piece of paper falls out of this pocket* mhmm? *picks it put and reads it...um I'll be back Naruto.
*Goes to where it says go*
Sasuke: ....*looks down* ....
Reads: Rest in Peace Itachi Uchiha

Yeah yeah I'll be here if i'm asleep or off it's pure bad luck for me cause im on almost literally 24/7 so i look forward to judging your guys stories! and Good luck!

Awesome! Cause I really don't feel like reading at this moment. lol

Juging needs to be done today, Mondays always starts the new topics.

Well until AFF gets here I'll tell you guys what I think about your storys.

Clutch- Dude you write very awesome storys, your better than me I'll say that.
& He didn't have to kill his self. TT_TT
Itachi: I loved your stroy, I'm always a sucker for a Itachi and Sasuke story. <3 <3
Itachi you've always been a great brother to sasuke, even in this story when you
didn't want sasuke to know you where dying. Why you have to die tho? T_T


Anywho Topic 4: Action
The winners will be put up when AFF gets here.

Hey guys I'm here so I read Both stories and i have to say... holy crap guys, That was great!
Clutch--- I have to say that was dramatic with a relatively good build up, but the suicide was... wow... okay? so Honestly you could have written it better, still great job man, I give you 2nd.
Itachi--- Dude you write great stories, but you should have made a better build up to revealing Itachis illness, but it was very dramatic and i loved it so congratulations, you took 1st place in my books!
Great job guys and Be ready for a challenge cause I'm joining in the next Topic!

Awesome! Thanks for judging!! You help out a lot.
& You're doing the next one can't wait to read it.
You can judge anytime, you want.

Yep Count on having a hard time judging this time Yumi!

Awesome I won first! I didn't really think I would because I didn't add a lot of details as in what you said like about the illness and ect and plus there where a lot of mistakes but I ran out of time, procrastinating. >.>
I always write action storys so the next one will be easy.

ACTION! ohhhh.... Can I use my ms paint animation? jk... BUT! incase you're interested.... Anywho the next topic might be hard for me cause I like getting descriptive with action. I might just write part two to my heart of the fierce series.

That was awesome, I don't think I could draw every scene like you did.
I use to always draw powerful girls, I had like a whole book full of them.
I'd say my drawing skill from a 1 to 10 is probably a 6 1/2.
But lets stick with the writing yes? & the more detailed the better the story.

thanks and yes I agree, more detail kicks ass, but I'm afraid of breaking the 5 page story rule XD

Just post your story and lets just see, I'm not exactly used to writing Action, I'm more of, Drama, Romantic-comedy writer type so I needed a challenge, I probably would have won the 3rd topic easily so I decided not to write for it

hopefully!

THE HEART OF THE FIERCE
PART 1

Karanlos stood in the center of a dusty arena with sharp hardened orange clay spikes reaching out from the walls of the giant oval. He was adorned with armor on his legs, arms and waist. Planted in the brown-orange dirt before him was a double tipped spear with a slightly curved blade, looking like a giant pizza slicer forged in the most fiery pits of hell. Karanlos was an Alkantauri boy, and today he faced a challenge every Alkantauri boy must face. To become a warrior you must fight like one... That is the Alkantauri male's job... As a boy, an Alkantauri's father trains him... Every ounce of combat, bloodshed, and rage is passed from him to the child as natural as genetics. However, the war with the Syste and their allies cut short the lives of many warriors. Including Karanlos's father.
Six Alkantauri warriors stepped forth into the arena with similar battle gear from a ramp leading from underground. They all surrounded Karanlos. All with marks of shame and dishonor branded and burned into their chests. The spiked bones pertruding from their heads shaved down. This was their punishment... But in this punishment there was opprotunity. The opprotunity to lift the dishonor bestowed upon them... All they had to do was quite simple... Kill Karanlos.
Karanlos was not trained in the true Alkantauri way. With no father to train him, Karanlos trained himself. Besides who else would train him? To train another warrior's child was simply dishonorable. None-the-less today was Karanlos's time... His right of Passage. No Alkantauri warrior in the Empire's history ever passed this test without the fatherly training... Still, even knowing this., Karanlos stood in the face of certain death.
A man in black and red robe entered the highest seat over looking the arena and all in the arena bowed. Even Karanlos and the warriors who surrounded him like a pack of starved wolves, hungering for their next meal.
At this robed Alkantauri's side was another Alkantauri roughly the same age as Karanlos. The man in the robe spoke. All listened... His name was Kamourg... Emperor of the Alkantauri Empire.
Kamourg: Rise for your elders child. (Karanlos stood tall and confident) The path of a warrior is one all Alkantauri take. Today you look to begin your path... State your name.
Karanlos: I am Karanlos...(holds his arms out) Left arm of Lajori... Right arm of Kuropaak.
Kamourg: Pick up your weapon.
Karanlos picks up the bladed spear before him, stares at it for a moment as the six dishonered warriors close in with similar weapons. Then, he throws the blade to the floor and the six warriors stop momentarily, mostly confused.
Karanlos looks at the Emperor and scowls.
Karanlos: I'm not gonna need it...
The young Alkantauri next to the Emperor leans in.
Kid: Father... Is he insane?
Kamourg: Watch young prince... He might teach you something.
Kid: There's nothing he could teach me.
Kamourg: Sit down Chitat... You still haven't taken your right of passage yet.
Chitat: So...
Kamourg: Karanlos is three years younger than you.
Chitat says nothing and continues to look on with jealosy in his eyes.
The six warriors look at eachother and start to chuckle, expecting the easiest of kills. Honor would be theirs again, and at the same time, weilding the same strange blades,... they attack.


PART 2

Karanlos targets the furthest target, and with lightning speed, rolls, elbows the warrior in the back of the knee bringing him to the ground. Without hesitation and with great agility, Karanlos back flips on to the warriors back, then almost as if using the warrior's body as if it was a trampoline, corkscrew flips high in the air. In mid air spin, Karanlos snaps the neck of one of the attackers. The warrior's body falls limp, and Karanlos stands confidently in front of the spiked wall. The farthest warrior thrusts himself up from his knee and throws his blade. Karanlos cartwheels, kicking the blade in to the air. It shears several of the clay spikes off, and a spectator reaches over the wall and grabs the blade. His comrades around him cheer as if he just caught a game winning homerun at a baseball game... Karanlos again showed no hesitation. While the four other remaining warriors snickered at the warrior who threw the blade, Karanlos ran up the spikes like steps, grabbed two of the spikes that were just sheared, bounced off the newly created bald spot on the wall towards the remaining five and threw the spikes. Both spikes found their mark, going through one warrior neck each. Both victims fell dead... Three down... Three to go... Karanlos flew in at the furthest warrior yet again, but one of the other warriors swung his blade. Karanlos quickly changed his body position and somersaulted over the surface of the blade and drop kicked the furthest warrior on to his back. The sixth warrior then stepped up to Karanlos with a scowl on his face. Karanlos smirked, raised his hand an gestured, "bring it". The warrior threw down his blade and rushed at Karanlos with fists flying. All being blocked or dodged by Karanlos, who noticed another warrior behind him. The warrior swung his blade, Karanlos ducked, and the blade swiftly took off the head of the willingly unarmed fist swinging warrior. The last armed warrior kept on Karanlos, trying to use the spear to skew him to the ground, but Karanlos rolled and then mule kicked him, sending him flying into a spike on the wall. However this battle wasn't over as a familiar knee hit Karanlos dead in the nose putting him on his back... An embarrased, heavy breathing warrior picked Karanlos up by his ponytailed hair.
Warrior: You brat! You think you can just come in here and embarass me and my men without a fight!?!
Karanlos: No... (holds his right hand stiff and flat) I wasn't trying to embarrass you... (strikes the warrior's throat with his razor sharp nails)
Warrior: GAGH!!! (falls to his knees, hand still around Karanlos's hair)
Karanlos: (Removes warrior's hand) I was trying to kill you. (pulls his now blood covered hand from the warrior's throat and looks at the emperor with an intense stare as the warrior falls forward dead) rrrrrrRRRRRRRAAAAAAAAHHHHHH!!!!! I AM KARANLOS! LEFT ARM OF LAJORI... RIGHT ARM OF KUROPAAK!!! AM I NOT WORTHY OF THE TITLE "ALKANTAURI"!?!!!!!!!
The crowd cheers intensely
Crowd: KARANLOS! KARANLOS! KARANLOS! KARANLOS!
The emperor stands and the crowd goes quiet in the blink of an eye...
Kamourg: You are worthy... Fellow Alkantauri brother... Will you fight with us... In Lakeeta's holy name, and use the gifts she has bestowed upon us to fight for the honor and glory of the Empire!?!
Karanlos: Until my death. The empire I will serve.
Kamourg: My fellow Alkantauri brothers!!! Welcome your new brother with songs of battle, and the finest of beverage... Left arm of Lajori... Right arm of Kuropaak... KARANLOS!!!
Crowd: KARANLOS! KARANLOS! KARANLOS!
The emperor and his son take an exit. Karanlos looks to the sky...
Karanlos: Thank you Lakeeta... Thank you... Father, I will avenge you... The blood of the Syste Alliance will run thick on my blade.
To be continued...

(I've got a better pic of Karanlos somewhere but I can't find it :(....)

Clutch it doesn't look so long. xD (Cool pic.)

Hopefully this what happen but if I'm not on friday or thrusday I'll be back.
But Aff and Itachi send in your storys.

Actually the fact that most of the story was a fight scene helped. Good thing I didn't add too much dialogue. XD

Haha yea. xD

I am I haven't really thought about what I'm gonna write about but of course from Naruto on this round.
You already know this week is busy 4 me and you.

Hey! I NEVER said I wasn't going to write for action but something came up. So I might not be able to even if I wanted to okay?! I want to write for action that's why I CAN'T Geez!

AFF I wasn't yelling bro, I was just saying .xDD

Well now that I have to use my droid I can't go wrist stories, my computer broke so its useless

Okay? I didn't know.

Itachi's story will be late once again but only 2 people are doing this contest so I'll allow it.

Story will probably be here tomorrow.

Topic: Action.
By: Itachi Uchiha
Chracters: Naruto Characters mixed with some OC's.
A bit about the characters, Yumiko, Emiko and Akio. Are me and Yumi's Oc's
But he for you read this is probably one of the most crapest storys I've ever written, I hate it but I
don't have time right now to write another one. Like it really sucks, I know I want win first.
But enjoy this piece of crap. :3
Madara: In order for us to believe what you say, we need a task done.
Itachi: ..*rises eyebrow* What is this ..task?
Pein: We need you to obation the ...one called Emiko.
Itachi: ...Emiko..
Madara: *smiles*

Emiko: Akio..my love?
Akio: What?
Emiko: Is there anything sweet to eat? I'm hungry fighting makes my hungry..
Akio: *looks at yumiko*
Yumiko: Of coruse there is..there 's always sweets here. Just don't get anything that has my name on it.
Emiko: Bla bla.. who asked you Yumi?*gets a soda* by the way what happend to Itachi I haven't seen him in a while.
Yumiko: Oh he's with the Akatuski I haven't talked to him in a while since we left.
Emiko: Oh *drinks soda*
Yumiko: *phone rings* ..*looks at it* Speaking of the devil..*answers* Hello?
Itachi: Yumi...where are you right now?
Yumiko: I'm at my house, why?
Itachi: I want to see you..bring your sister...
Yumiko: Emiko? Oka..you want us to come over there?
Itachi: Yes, I have to go now see you..
Yumiko: Okay!.. bye! ?
Itachi: Bye...*hangs up* ....*looks at Madara*
Madara: hehe..*walks off*
Itachi:....
Yumiko: Hey Emiko wanna go to Itachi's?
Emiko: Oh um sure, why not.
Akio: ..I'm going also.
Yumiko: Oka.
*they walk there*
Itachi: *Is outside, sees them coming*....yumi!
Yumiko: Itachi! *runs up and hugs him* Why you wanted to see me all of a sudden?
Itachi: I've just missed y'all, especally you.
Yumiko: *smiles* I've missed you too!
Itachi: I see you've brought Akio as well?
Yumiko: Oh yes they're always together, you can't really keep them apart.
Itachi: Mhpm nice to know...
Yumiko: *yawns* What a long distance we travel..I'm going in your room. Itachi-kun
Itachi: Alright..
Yumiko: *walks in*
Deidara: Yumi! How are you?
Yumiko: I'm good, tired..lazy..but good.
Hidan: *sees yumi* Why in the fuck is that fucker here?
Yumiko: Nice to see you to hidan..-.-
Emiko: *is walking inside, sees itachi* Hi itachi!
Itachi: *looks up* Oh.. hello.
Akio: *stares at itachi* mph...
Madara: Emiko, nice to see you!
Emiko: You to Madara..
Pein: Are the guys that are going ready?
Sasori: *sitting reading* *looks up* Yes.
Deidara: *is chewing clay in his hands* *smiles* hehe almost done.
Kisame: *looks up* Yes, *looks at itachi* you gonna stay here itachi?
Itachi: I don't have a choice.
Kisame: Oh right..*looks at Emiko* Better you then me.
Yumiko: Oh? Y'all have to leave? So soon..:P
Kakuza: yes, goodbye.
*they leave*
Yumiko: Oh itachi, your staying here! Good.
Itachi: Yes I did invite you over didn't I.
Yumiko: True, I wish you would have called us a bit earlyer tho
it's almos about to be 10:00pm.
Itachi: Yes I am sorry but we always have tomorrow? You can stay in my room with me
if you'd like.
Yumiko: Yes! What about Emiko and Akio?
Itachi: Sasori and Deidara's room?
Yumiko: I'll be in your room oka?
Itachi: Un huh. *walk to emiko and akio* Hey you two can stay in Sasori and Deidara's room if you'd like?
Emiko: Oh that be awesome! I'm a bit tired ..away ways we had to go fight some people from the leaf, *yawns* they really need better ninja.
Itachi: Is that so? well your welcome to go anytime.
*Hour or two later*
*Everyone is sleep*
Itachi: * Is laying down by Yumiko, looks at her*
Yumiko: zzz
Itachi: ...*gets up* *walks out the room*
Madara: *walks past itachi, you know what to do*
Itachi: *walks to Emiko's room* ...She's still awake?
Emiko: *see's a dark shawdow at the door* ...itachi?
Itachi: ...
Emiko: Itachi? Is that you?
Itachi:...*tsukuyomi*
Emiko: *looks around* The hell is going on? shit.. am I in genjustu?
*Pops up at her old home* ....huh? *someone walks out of it*
Mommy?
Mitsuko: Emiko...come here my child.
Emiko: Mommy!! *runs to her, and hugs her* I missed you so much..!
Mitsuko: You missed me huh? WELL WHY IN THE HELL DID YOU LET ME DIE!
Emiko: ...mom..I didn't..*tear falls down her cheek*
Mitsuko: YOUR ALL SO FUCKING POWERFUL NOW! YOU CAN KILL ANYONE BUT
WHY NOT THEN WHY DIDN'T YOU SAVE ME AND YOUR FATHER? YOUR A WORTHLESS CHILD. *Pulls out a knife*
Emiko: I-I It wasn't my fault I wasn't poweful then!!!
Mitsuko: Well you are now! Kill me!! Bitch!
Emiko: No I couldn't!! STOP IT!
Mitsuko: Your worthless! * Kicks Emiko agaisnt a wall* Worthless..
Shiro: *pops up with blood on his face* Now, now Mitsuko..it wasn't her fault..*picks up Emiko and hugs her* ...
Emiko: ....dad..
Shiro: ITS YOU FAULT YOU COULDN'T RAISE A GOOD CHILD!
Mitsuko: I'LL KILL YOU! *TAKES OUT HE KNIFE AND STABS HIM*
Shiro: ...*is about to die* *rubs emikos hair* I always loved you!
Emiko: STOP IT!!! GET ME OUT OF HERE!!!!!!!!!!! SOMEONE HELP ME!!
Itachi: *looks at emiko passed out on the floor* *picks her up and carrys her away*
Akio: *sees a dark figure walking out the room* mhmm *falls back asleep*
Madara: Itachi..you've made it with our emiko..
Itachi: ...
Pein: put her there..she's still in so some sort of genjustu?
Itachi: *knods head*
Pein: Well we shall begain..
Itachi: *starts to walk away*
Madara: Oh itachi we're not done with you yet, if anyone trys to interfear kill them, oh and don't let other to out of this hide out.
Itachi: *keeps walking*
Akio: *wakes up* ...*looks around* Emiko..? EMIKO!! *runs and looks for her*
where is she..? *looks at the time 4:24am* She'd be sleep at this time..*walks to yumi*
*wakes her up*
Yumiko: What is?
Akio: Have you seen Emiko?
Yumiko: No..it's fucking 4am where would she be?
Akio:...I don't know I think she was tooken..
Yumiko: Why?
Akio: I don't know, I thought I rememebr seeing someone in the room, but I'm not sure if I was dreaming or not.
Yumiko: Well come on we have to go find her..*looks to her left and see that itachi is not sleep by her* Itachi? Wonder where he went?
Akio: He probably took her I don't trust anyone here.
Yumiko: No itachi wouldn't..I sure.
Akio: Psh..
Yumiko: ugh come on. *run outside is about to leave with akio* ...*stops*
Akio: What is it?
Yumiko: I feel a lot of charka.. *looks up and see's shargain* Itachi?
Itachi: *jumps down and walks into the moon light*
Yumiko: Oh it's only you..what are you doing?
Itachi: No, the question is what are you to doing?
Yumiko: Oh well we're trying to go find Emiko she disappered.
Itachi: Is that so?
Akio: Hell yes it is, you took her didn't you!
Itachi: What if I say I did?
Akio: Grr! Don't piss me off itachi, did you?
Itachi: Did I?
Yumiko: You to stop it, well itachi we're going to go find her would you like to come?
Itachi: No..
Yumiko: ...why not?
Itachi: Because I know where she is.
Yumiko: You do where?
Itachi: i can;t tell you.
Yumiko: W-why not.
Itachi: Cause I can't ..now get back in that hideout..I have no time to play 25 questions.
Yumiko: Grr..no!
Itachi: What did you just say? No?
Yumiko: You heard me.
Itachi: *pops up behind her* You stood up to the love of your life?
Yumiko: ...yes..give me back my sister now..or I'll kill you!
Itachi: I can't..*pulls out four kunia knifes*
Yumiko: *moves away from him* ..grr...
Itachi: Enough of all the talking..if you do not want to go back inside, I have no choice but to kill you.
Yumiko: Then I guess I'll die.
Itachi: ...!!!!! ...very well then.
Yumiko: But not without a fight.
Akio: ...
Itachi: ...*waves hand signs* *katon goukakyuu no jutsu*
Yumiko: Shit..*moves ou the way barely* *sigh* I-I can't beat you itachi!
Itachi: ....I know
Yumiko: ....*Lightning Release* Shoots it at itachi*
Itachi: *fireballs justu*
Yumiko: shit shit shit! *runs* AHHH! *Gets hit in the leg*
Itachi: Are you not trying to save your sister..your stronger than this.
Akio: ....grr..*runs up behind itachi and stabs him in the back*
Itachi: *poofs into back crows they all flay around akio and yumiko*
Akio: *runs to yumi* You alright?
Yumiko: Yea..can we save her?
Akio: I don't know..
Emiko: *wakes up* Huh where am I?
Madara: Hello, emiko.
Emiko: Huh..hi..*looks down is strabted down to the table* The hell is going on here?
Madara: Something important...you see you have a bit of the 3 tails power up inside of you..
and we need to get that out.
Emiko: What? Why get me out of here!!!
Madara: Now, now..you'll get out as soon as we're done, maybe not alive but it all bepends on you. *looks at Pein*
Pein: *knods head*
Madara: We will begin down.
Pein: *walks up to here* *places his hand on her head* *Ningendō*
Emiko: ahhhh!!!!!! STOP IT!!!!!!
Yumiko: Itachi...you don't have to do this...why would you do this.
Itachi: ....*flys together* *walks up to both of them*...*and looks down at them*
Yumi....
Yumiko: *smiles a bit* ...itachi..
Itachi: *waves hand signs* I'm sorry..
Yumiko: What?
Akio...
Itachi: *Amaterasu*
Yumiko: ...itachi...*falls on the ground*
Emiko: AHHHH, *Whole body is numb*
Madara: Almost done.
Emiko: *cloes her eyes* ....Yumiko.. Akio...I'm sorry..I don't think I can make it....AHHHHHH! *grabs peins hand* Stop!
Pein: Most.....done.
Emiko: *coughs up blood* *her hand falls down*
Madara: good.
Itachi: *looks down at Yumi and akio* ...*moves her hair out of her face*...farewell..

Itachi- um I agree with you it needs more of a plot, no that's no it more detail. But I still love it! I'm in the story yay!
Clutch-I kind of didn get one part, but there was nothing wrong with it awesome!!
I didn't even pick who won this one.
At first it was a tie, then another person join and clutch won.

1st: Clutch
2nd: Itachi
So clutch as to pick the next topic.

That Alkantauri world is just.... so immensely ingraved in my brain. And it's almost like I have that whole story already in my head. How the Alkantauri came to power, and their philosophy and religion. The title Heart of the Fierce is merely there because that's the name of the ship that Karanlos will eventually take command of. If you have any questions about what some of the terms mean, let me know. For example

Karanlos: I am Karanlos...(holds his arms out) Left arm of Lajori... Right arm of Kuropaak.

Alkantauri don't have last names, they consider a child as a part of themselves. Thus Karanlos is the left arm of his mother whose name was Lajori and the right arm of his father whose name was Kuropaak. Why arms? Alkantauri belief is that Lakeeta, the goddess of war, reached out to the Alkantauri people and showed them the way of the warrior and give birth to the Empire. You need arms to reach. It's the same concept. Two parents reach out and give life to their child.Left arm always being mother. Lakeeta was said to be holding her spear with her right hand so she reached out with her left. Mother of an empire, reached with her left arm, you get it. The father gives the child the training he needs to become a warrior representing the spear held by the right arm.

Next topic.... Free writing. I wanna use another easy card and post the rest of the Jemuzu story I've got so far XD

Yes, free writing is much easyer. xD

Awesome choice, it free writing! Now you two get to work.
& Clutch that helped a lot thanks. c:

np Yumi.

(Ill Join!)

Topic: Free Writing
Characters: Itzu Senade, Irani Senade, Shino Liraden
Itzu: Irani! Get out of the way!
Irani: *ducks*
Itzu: *slashes a dark beam out of the tip of his sword*
Enemy: *health bar goes down*
Shino: Irani, you are getting in the way
Irani: Sorry Im new to this game
Itzu: *sighs* Lets take a break *presses a button on some goggles and he exits the battle feild*
Irani: *presses the button*
Shino: *presses the button*
Itzu/Shino/Irani: *takes the goggles off and the suit*
Irani: I don’t understand that game…….
Itzu: It is a lot of getting used to.
Shino: Not really, its pretty simple, if someone is coming from behind you with a long ranged attack, you dodge or duck.
Irani: But I did duck!
Itzu: Who wants some cake?
Irani: CAKEEEE!!!!!
Itzu: Ill get us some cake.
*After the break*
Itzu: Want to get back to the game?
Irani: Im not sure…..
Shino: We will go on practice mode.
Irani: Fine.
*They get the goggles and suit back on and enter the game*
Itzu: Okay target practice.
Irani: I don’t know how to do any long distance moves……
Shino: Its simple, the easiest one is the slash. You go from down and carry to over your shoulder. Watch. *Holds his sword parallel to his right leg, then quickly barely able to see his hand carries it over the shoulder and a black slash swings from the sword, totally obliterating the target*
Irani: Wow! Let me try! *Attempts to do the same, but accidently cuts her cheeck* Owwww!
Itzu: Irani are you okay?
Irani: Dang this system is so realistic.
Itzu: *sighs* Fine, lets just do close range.
*3 zombies digitally appear from green numbers*
Itzu: You understand how to use your sword right? *summons digital sword*
Irani: Barely.
Shino: Well try.
Itzu: *charges at the zombie and then quickly slashes the zombie into several pieces*
Shino: Well I can beat that. *charges at the zombie and chops it into pieces*
Itzu: You did the same as me.
Shino: Shut up.
Irani: How do I kill a zombie don’t they just come back alive?!
Itzu: You have to cut through the whole body, making 2 pieces.
Irani: *sighs* Here goes nothing. *Succesfully does the cut* Yay! I did it!
Itzu: As long as you know that, you should be able to catch on easier, okay?
Irani: Alright.
Shino: RESUME! *The game’s environment returns to where they were before the break*
Itzu: READY!
Irani: PLAY! *The game begins*
Boss: *shoots a pure white beam at Irani*
Irani: How do I block?!
Itzu: *Dashes infront and reflects the beam back with the sword*Angle the sword correctly.
Boss: *Roars of pain and falls on accedient*
Shino: Your done with! *Slashes through the head of the beast and it disappears*
Irani: When did we get to the boss?! We were fighting a small army of Bilofo.
Itzu: Buffalo.
Irani: I thought it was some weird creature!
Itzu: Well I think somebody resumed the wrong saved file! *Gives a look at Shino*
Shino: Sorry geez…….
Itzu: We minus well continue on from here…..
Irani: What?!
Shino: It can be dangerous to stop this game before a checkpoint.
Irani: Why did you get me playing this game?!
Itzu: Cause, all you do is sleep.
Irani: O shut up!
Itzu: Well lets go on. *Walks down a corridor and sees a 200 feet (length width and heigh, a square) lavapit that seemed to be have no where to cross*
Irani: What do we do now?!
Itzu: Seems easy.
Irani: What?!
Itzu: Look at the lava tynasis we collected from the boss?
Irani: Tynasis?
Itzu: They turn whatever type it is into hard coal, so water tynasis will make water to become coal.
Shino: *Throws some of the lava tynasis in the lava and it becomes hard coal*
Irani: THIS GAME IS CONFUSING!
Shino: *Pulls out a map* Don’t worry we are near a check point.
Irani: Good.
Itzu: *continues down*
*They reach the check point after several fights*
Irani: So we reach the checkpoint. We should get off even if I just got a hang of it, its probably late at night now.
Shino: Agreed. Itzu, Im spending the night right?
Itzu: Yeah.
*They leave the game once again*
Itzu: Good night.
Irani: Night!
Shino: Night! *Everyone falls asleep*
…………………
Steven: Checkpoint!
Susan: Yeah!
Joe: Fine.
Susan: You guys are good at playing Itzu and Shino.
Steven: Well you are new.
Joe: And Itzu and Irani suck.
Steven: Shut up.


(Videogame Inception! XD)

Yay! Thanks for joining! Riku xD

The Jemuzu Story
Episode 2 - How does Jemuzu pray?
1987

A young Jemuzu looks out of his bedroom window at the orphanage he's lived at since the death of his mother and dissapearance of his father. A nun stands outside his door and knocks.

Nun: Jemuzu... are you ready yet?
Jemuzu: I'm not going Sister Beth. They're all phony!
Beth: May I come in?
Jemuzu: I don't care.
Beth enters the room.
Beth: You know Jemuzu... Just because you think you can read someone well, dosen't mean that you can actually read them.
Jemuzu: Why are you so skeptical of me?
Beth: I'm not.
Jemuzu: Yes you are... You always have been. Not only that, you're annoyed... Why won't I just be like the other kids?... That's what I sense from you.
Beth: Please Jemuzu... Just go to the sermen at least.
Jemuzu: No... Why should I have to get dressed up in your uniform to pray to a god, that you say, sees all, and hears all? Can't he hear me pray in this room?
Beth: Of course he can.
Jemuzu: Then this is where I'll pray.
Beth closses her eyes
Jemuzu: Let me guess... "Such a poor child, why must he feel so alone?" It's because I am.
Beth opens her eyes wide and Jemuzu smirks.
Beth: At least come downstairs to eat then.
Jemuzu: I'll be down in a minute then. (Beth turns to walk to the door) Oh and Sister Beth!(Beth turns her head) I called it right on, didn't I?
Beth:(turns her head back away) The cafeteria is still open.(Exits room)
Jemuzu gets changed into a plain black t-shirt and blue jeans, and heads downstairs to an empty cafeteria. He gets himself a bowl of cerial, sits at one of the tables and begins to eat. He hears sounds from the church. The organ playing hymns, the priest reading from the bible, then... the other sounds that only he could hear. Feelings and emotions echoed in Jemuzu's head, almost creating their own voices. Voices that urked Jemuzu, like a thousand needles in his head. He threw down his spoon and covered his ears, but he could still hear them. Like a migrane that wouldn't go away, a pain that could not be dulled, the voices struck down on him like a thousand bullpin hammers pounding the needles deeper in to his skull.
Voices: Damnit, I'm missing the game. Is this thing over yet. Every sunday, yap yap yap, amen. Why does my wife drag us here. I could be sleeping right now!!!
Jemuzu pounds the table with clinched fists, stands up and walks towards the church. Beth notices him...
Beth: Jemuzu, you decided to make it after all!
Jemuzu walks up to the alter. He takes his fingers and makes the cross.
Jemuzu: In the name of the father, son, and the holy spirit. Amen.
Jemuzu lightly shoves the priest away from the microphone.
Jemuzu:(looks at the roof of the church) Forgive me father, I am about to sin... Badly.
Priest: Jemuzu! What are you doing?
Beth: Jemuzu?
Jemuzu:(speaks into the microphone) If you don't want to be here, why do you come!?! Do you think the big man in the f*ckin' sky gives two sh*ts if you do or not!?! Go watch your football game, go sleep in, and if you really want to come here, fine!!! But do it of your own free will... If you don't wanna be here then don't come!!! If you actually believe in this God you're praying to, then you should know he's supposed to be a forgiving one... I don't think he's gonna care if ya miss a day.
Priest: Jemuzu!
The crowd looks on in shock, not being able to believe what is comming from the six year old's mouth.
Jemuzu: All I'm saying is... Come here when you really give a sh*t about being here.
Jemuzu storms out of the church.
Beth: Jemuzu...
Priest: Let him go Sister Beth.
Beth: But...
Priest: He's done nothing but cause problems since he gotten here!
Beth: I know... But he's just a troubled child.
Priest: Exactly! He dosen't belong here, he belongs in a mental asylum!
Beth:(Gives the priest an angry look) The worst part of it is that... He's actually kind of right! (Walks outside and Jemuzu is gone)
Beth: Jemuzu!!!

Meanwhile Jemuzu has made his way to the cemetary.
He stands overlooking a simple headstone that reads, " Ashuri Kuratchi 1957 - 1981. Loving Mother."
Jemuzu: Well Mother, I'm back again. It's been a rough time lately. They've got me going into first grade this year... I'll try to block out the other kids, but it's so tough... Actually If you could Mother, tell God that I'm sorry for what I just did... I'm sure he already knows but I can't exactly tell him face to face like you can...(sighs) Still no sign of my father anywhere either, but I don't know, maybe one day he'll come back... Right?
Jemuzu pauses for a moment and looks up to the sky.
Jemuzu: I wish I could've known you mom... and... even though, we've never really met... (sighs) I love you too...
Beth finds Jemuzu in the cemetary and walks up to him.
Beth: Jemuzu...
(The priest walks up behind Beth)
Priest: Now what is he doing? He's not gonna start vandalizing...(Beth interupts)
Beth: That's his mother's grave...
Priest:(puzzled look) Huh... after he just...
Beth: This is the way he prays...
Jemuzu stands up and walks past the priest and Beth not saying a single word.


Episode 3 - Catching an Eagle
Beth: Jemuzu! (runs to Jemuzu's side) Please Jemuzu... Calm down and come back home.
Jemuzu: I have no home... I never have.
Beth: Why... Must you be so stubborn!?!
Jemuzu: Why must I live the way you want me to!?!... I'm leaving...
Beth: Where will you go?
Jemuzu: I gotta few questions for god... Maybe I'll go to heaven. *smirks*
Beth: Jemuzu, that's not the answer. If anything, suicide will send you straight to hell.
Jemuzu: Who said I was gonna kill myself? Just leave me alone. (starts to run)
Jemuzu gets back to his room in the orphanage and packs all of his clothes, blanket, and pillow in a large garbage bag. He hears the priest's and Beth's voices comming down the hall.
Jemuzu: No... I'm not staying... I'll meet my faith the same way I met this world... Alone. (locks the door and throws the bag of his stuff out the window.)
There's a knock at the door....
Beth: Jemuzu!?! Are you there!?!
Jemuzu climbs out the window, and uses the gutter drain to shimmy his way down from the second floor. He grabs his bag and runs off...
The priest pulls out a key and unlocks the door. He and Beth only find an empty room. Not even a note.
Jemuzu walks on through a rundown subburban area. He passes a street sign that reads "Welcome to Compton"
Jemuzu: Compton... Hmph...
He continues walking and then it hits him...
Jemuzu: Agh!
The thoughts and pain of the people in the vacinity rushed through to his brain. He stumbled to a street light and fell to the ground holding his head. A teenage boy walked over to him.
Boy: Hey homie, You aight dawg?
Jemuzu heard different words.
Boy: Hey kid, what you got in that bag lil' homie?
Jemuzu: Go away... Leave me alone...
Boy: Yo dawg (peeks inside the garbage bag) I'm only tryin' to help ya.
Jemuzu: Don't look in my bag!
Boy: Homie, I ain't gon' rob you! Crazy!
Jemuzu:(reaches to the kid's waist and grabs a Desert Eagle pistol) You're gonnaz kill me, then rob me! (aims at the boy's head)
Boy: W-w-wait homie... It ain't like that dawg...
Jemuzu: Not any more huh? No gun, no guts or what? Go away... NOW!
The boy runs off and Jemuzu gets to his feet. Jemuzu begins to walk on... His journey, just beggining.
Jemuzu:(talks to himself) I'm coming dad... I'll find you soon enough... We'll be a family for once. You can tell me all about mom... *smiles as a tear rolls down his cheek* Soon Dad, I'll be home soon.

Episode 4 - Street 101
Jemuzu ran through a field of fresh cut grass, his mother and father calling him with open arms. Then the strangest sound echoed over the plains.
Jemuzu stops running wondering why his parents don't seem to hear it. Suddenly...
Jemuzu quickly opens his eyes as the full sound hits him. A train passing by makes a roar above him seemingly shaking the viadock where he slept for the night. Jemuzu pushed his blankets off him and pulled them back over himself right away.
Jemuzu: Cold! Damn it's cold.
The morning sun was just starting it's rise, the streets were quiet and the air still cold from the night. Jemuzu reached into his bag and pulled out a fresh pair of clothes. He dressed himself under the blanket, still trying to keep warm.
Finally the first car of the day passes by and Jemuzu gets to his feet and another sound hits his head... A strange grumbling noise. Jemuzu finishes repacking his things.
Jemuzu:*hears the grumble again* I'm hungry...
Jemuzu makes his way towards downtown L.A. with his stomach still growling. Then he notices it... A drivethru filled with cars.
Jemuzu:*stomach growls again* Shut up! We're getting breakfast now...
Another car pulls up to the window and Jemuzu gets behind a nearby dumpster. The worker hands the driver a cup of coffee and the car rolls off.
Jemuzu: Damn... C'mon! Big order...
The next car pulls up to the window and another cup of coffee is served.
Jemuzu: Son of a b****!
Passerbys hear Jemuzu. Two women with their noses high to the air.
Woman1: Kids these days with their language!
Woman2: Do you think their parents teach them those things!?!
Jemuzu scowls but then grins as he looks at their purses.
Jemuzu:*whispers* Gator skin... Hmmm... You two are paying for my breakfast.
Jemuzu leaves his bag by the dumpster, runs by and grabs the first woman's purse.
Woman1: Hey! That brat stole my purse!!!
Jemuzu runs a few blocks and finally gets to an alley. He sits down and begins counting.
Jemuzu: 320, 340, 360, 380, 400... 400 bucks!
A voice calls from the alley entrance.
Voice: Forget something?
It's the boy from earlier... He walks up to Jemuzu, who now atares down the barrel of the same dessert eagle he'd just acquired the day before.
Boy: There's rules in this town motha f*cka! (puts the gun to Jemuzu's forehead) Numba 1, Don't stash yo heat in the open... Numba 2, Don't ever f*ck with me... And Numba 3! You betta' find yo faith quick!
BANG!!!!!

Episode 5 - Enter Eddie
Boy: There's rules in this town motha f*cka! (puts the gun to Jemuzu's forehead) Numba 1, Don't stash yo heat in the open... Numba 2, Don't ever f*ck with me... And Numba 3! You betta' find yo faith quick!
BANG!!!

The boy's attention quickly turns to a cook in a messy apron lighting a cigarette. He points the gun at the man who raises his hands into the sky, dropping the lighter and his cigarettes. Quickly, Jemuzu makes a move and gets a hand on the gun. A few rounds are fired and they riccochette off the ground. One zips by the cook's ear and he quickly gets back in the restaurant. The gun gets knocked loose in the boy's and Jemuzu's scuffle and skips across the ground. Another round goes off and both of them stop with eyes wide. They back away from each other saying nothing but the boy's voice speaks in Jemuzu's head...
Boy's voice: I... I got shot... I'm... I'm gonna die... Why?... I'm... I'm only 12 years old, I can't...
The boy falls over holding his blood stained t-shirt.
Jemuzu falls on his rear end and backs himself away from the body. Jemuzu gulps and uses the brick building behind him to help stand up. Suddenly Jemuzu hears sirens and his adrenaline shoots sky high... He looks around thinking "What do I do now!?!" Quickly Jemuzu grabs the pistol off the ground and uses the fire escape ladder on the side of the one building to get to the roof. On the roof he looks in all directions and sees four police cars comming from the east and another three approaching from the South. He looks five stories down at pavement on the west side of the building and on the north side a slightly taller building with an open window. Jemuzu hears a car door slam and takes a running jump for the open window. He hits the side of the building but grabs the window ledge and pulls himself inside.
Inside a young man is playing a guitar. He stops as Jemuzu climbs in.
Man: Dude, I see alot of crazy sh*t here in L.A. ... But that... I think took the cake... Well except for that crue concert in '81.
Jemuzu: Yeah, um... Sorry...
Man: For what? Dude, that was radical! What's your name lil' dude?
Jemuzu: Jemuzu.
Man: Jemuzu...
Jemuzu: Kuratchi
Man: Jemuzu Kuratchi... (puts hand to his chest) Eddie Howard... Future rock star, and one hell of a tattoo artist! Check this out (shows Jemuzu a tattoo of a cross on his arm) Pretty sick huh!?!
Jemuzu: Yeah, um... Nice! So, you live here?
Eddie: Totally, My mom kicked me outa the house so... Got my tattoo shop up and running, and now, my record shop.
Jemuzu: So it's a music store... And a tattoo parlor?
Eddie: It is as long as the feds don't find out (starts laughing) What the hell is with those sirens? (looks out the window)
Jemuzu: Don't!
Eddie: Damn dude (closses the blinds) It's 5-0 dude! They after you!?!
Jemuzu: It wasn't my fault! That kid was gonna shoot me! Please!
Eddie: Screw this! I'm not going to jail for you!
Jemuzu:(pulls out the gun and aims at Eddie) Please!
Eddie's eyes widen and Jemuzu starts to choke up. Finally Jemuzu points the gun to the sky and sets it on the ground.
Jemuzu: I'm sorry... I'm just... Trying to find my dad... That's all. (starts to cry)
Eddie:(looks down) Sh*t, pour kid... C'mon... ( There's a knock at the door) It's them. (hides Jemuzu in a closet) Just be quiet! (Answers the door to two police officers) Can I help you officers?
Officer: There was a shooting in the alley nearby. We just wanna know if everyone's alright here.
Eddie: I'm the only one living here, but yeah I'm fine.
Jemuzu at the momment is trying to hold back a sneeze
Officer: See anything suspicious?
Eddie: Officer, I was just playing my guitar! I had no idea... Sorry.
Officer: It's alright. Enjoy the rest of your day sir.
Eddie: You too officer (closses the door and Jemuzu sneezes) Bless you. (opens the closet)
Jemuzu: Thanks... But I should get going soon.
Eddie: Why?
Jemuzu: I'm trying to find my Dad.
Eddie: Don't you think you'll need a little help man?
Jemuzu: What?
Eddie: My pad is your pad buddy! I'll help ya find your old man.
Jemuzu smiles but then his stomach starts growling.
Eddie: By the sounds of it we'd better work on finding some chow first. Mickey D's sound good?
Jemuzu smiles and nods, and they both exit the appartment...
To be Continued....

Episode 1 Theme Song - link
Episode 2 Theme song - link
Episode 3 Theme song - link
Episode 4 Theme song - link
Episode 5 Theme song - link

I'll probably write my story later tonight, I don't want it to be late again.

I guess I'll start reading, good luck.

Oka so the winners are!!!
1st: Clutch
2nd:Riku

Clutch- Your story was awesome once again, but you story was a bit to long. Watch out for that oka? Oh yea the songs where epic.
Riku: I love your story also I loved the way it ended, so they where playing a video game in a video game? xD it need a bit more detail tho oka?

btw Itachi was gonna join but he went out of town away from internet and want be back until Monday.
Which starts a new topic.
But He'll be juging the next round because, I'll be joining the next round.
Topic: Romance :D
I've already half way written my story It's gonna be awesome.
Hint: Yoai with my to fav couples. xD
You Romance story can have kissing and crap I don't care. c:

Oh I'm juging now? oka. xD

Im not that good with writing romance..... Ill pass on this one.

@Itachi haha!
@Riku Oka!

Mhmm so is not one gonna do this one? I haven't even heard for clutch yet, I now romance is a hard topic but srsly that's the whole point of this contest mostly about the topic's and how well you can write a story staying on topic.
After the next free writing I had planned on stopping this contest for a bit because of a lot of reasons.
I was actually look forward to Romace.
I have to think about what I gonna do next, I've never had this problem before. xD

working on it.

Awesome, thanks. ^^
I'll post mine probably in 30 mins.

Dream Catcher

Jake Alo walks the streets of a torn up city with scared people hiding under any debris they can find. He wearing a black trench coat, torn black jeans, black steel toed boots, the pale skin of his showing chest bears scars and brusies. A broken rib bone pertrudes slightly through his skin. His pale face is slightly covered by his long black hair. His lips a pale blue grimace in disgust. His eyes pierce every thing in his path but his aim is clear. His shadow casts itself down the street and straight to a man laying on his back, trying to back himself away...
Man: Demon... You really are a demon!
Jake:*stops and his pale lips quiver slightly* No... You're a monster. Preying upon the weak with your power... You're pitiful... How any loving god would bless a man like you with the gift of living as a dreamer, baffles me... Ukawa Yohiko...
Ukawa: I'm... I'm sorry! I won't do it again!
Jake: Is that so? *29 different women appear behind Jake* Recognize them Ukawa?
Ukawa: No!
Jake: You don't recognize the people you killed?
One of the women stepped forward...
Woman: Why Ukawa? I trusted you!
Ukawa: Eiko?
Eiko: You remember now!?! That thing you slipped in my drink? To help me sleep better!!!
Ukawa: Eiko I, I, I... I didn't think...
The women dissapear and Jake is suddenly face to face with Ukawa.
Jake: Think what?
Ukawa: Please... I beg you... Let me go... I'll never use my power again I swear...
Jake:*holds his side and pulls Ukawa closer and looks into his eyes* You broke my rib...
Ukawa: I, I, I,....
Jake:*snaps Ukawa's neck* Have it written on your tombstone. *stands up* One of the people crawls out of the debris. She looks at Jake and smiles.
Girl: He's alive... Thank god... Jake!!! (runs to him)
Jake: Tsukiko... *embraces her as she leaps into his arms.*
Tsukiko: Oh my god Jake, your ribs... *runs her fingers over the bruises*
Jake: They'll be alright.
Tsukiko: They're broke Jake.
Jake: That just means they can be fixed.
Tsukiko:*kisses Jake*
Police officers suddenly start running up the street at Jake.
Officer 1: There he is!!! We got him this time!
Tsukiko: Jake, we gotta get outa here
Jake: I can't fly right now...
Tsukiko: Jake!?!
Jake: Hang on... *grunts and slams his hand to the ground*
The street collapses in front of the police officers leaving a large canyon 10 feet wide where the street used to be...
Tsukiko: Jake?
Jake: Trust me... *grabs Tsukiko and rolls over the edge of the cliff*
Tsukiko: JAKE!!!
They fall down into darkness but as light starts to shine Tsukiko sees jagged spikes of rock at the bottom.
Tsukiko: Jake!!!
Jake: We'll be fine... *closes his eyes an his face is showered by pure concentration*
Tsukiko: Jake do SOMETHING!!!
Jake: *opens his eyes and looks at Tsukiko* You have to believe in me Tsukiko...
Tsukiko:*looks down at the fast approaching bottom*
Jake: Tsukiko...
Tsukiko: *kisses Jake again and they both close their eyes*
Impact....
Tsukiko:*Opens her eyes* and finds herself on a bed with black pillows, sheets, and covers...* I never stopped believing...
Jake:*is laying next to her* That was close...
Tsukiko: Yeah... But finally... It looks like we have some time to be together...
Jake: Yeah... *wraps his arms around Tsukiko*
Suddenly there's a beeping sound... It starts faint but gets louder...
Tsukiko: Not again...
Jake: I'm so sorry Tsukiko...
Tsukiko: I know... me too...
Jake: Wait for me... Just a lil longer...
Tsukiko: Forever if I have to...
Jake kisses Tsukiko passionately, and when Tsukiko opens her eyes, Jake is gone.
Tsukiko: Have a good day... Dream Catcher...
Jake wakes up and turns a beeping alarm off that reads 11:00 am. He walks over to the window and opens the blinds looking over a snow covered Brooklyn. He stares for a moment, then turns around revealing his wounds have all been healed... He picks up the remote and turns on the tv. The news comes on.
TV: Well folks it seems to have happened again. The Nightmare Murderer was once again hard at work as a Queens man named Ukawa Yohiko was found dead in his bed this morning with a broken neck. Signs of the house show no forced entry and police are looking for any leads to the capture of the Nightmare Murderer. If you have any information please call the NYPD as soon as you possibly can...
Jake:*turns the tv off* You're welcome... *Puts on a Burger King uniform and walks out the door with a back pack*
Jake's voice can be heard as he walks down the salted sidewalk...

Jake: In this dark room I wait, for sleep to conquer my body.
I'm going on holiday, yet I know not where.
Hopes in my mind that you will be waiting there.
It keeps me awake with anticipation.
I can't stand it any longer. I hold my hopes close.
Wraped in many cloth. My blanket keeps us both warm.
Waiting for the bus of slumber to come...
Come soon bus... Please. To this cold corner of reality's despair.
For the beating of her heart and the softness of her hair.
Finally the bus arrives... To take me away from this street corner so cold.
It shall take me somewhere. What destination I do not know.
I see so many different things, for what reason, again, I do not know.
I search for her, through fields of flame and on beams of light.
In the deepest seas, and desolate craters alike...
Through terrains I've never seen before and in the stars up above.
Where have you gone, my most precious love?
I've seen you in these places before, yet you illude me tonight.
Please let me embrace my hopes before the sun's light.
Then I see you in the distance. So strong yet so frail.
But it's always too late, the clock sings it's tale...
Screaming it's words and conquering the sleep that once prevailed.
I step out the door and look to the bright blue sky of hell...
This world of nothing... My mind still dwells.
I think of you now... And how you're not in my life.
But I won't give up on you... I'll be home waiting for you.
I can't wait to see you again tonight.
-The End.... For now-

theme song... Motley Crue - If I die tomorrow.