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This is a response to the link. If あなた disagree with this article, instead of leaving pointless hate-spam, which is just a waste of time, please explain why あなた don’t like it, または any points I got wrong.

“The story is written compellingly enough that a wide body of readers is able to fit into the persona of Bella and 愛 Edward.”
I hate to break it to you, but that isn’t a result of good writing. It’s quite the opposite, actually. Bella is a very one-dimensional character. She has no real hobbies, defining character traits, または even any specific physical appearance, and because of the series being written in first person, it requires essentially no brainpower to imagine あなた are her. Simply put, she’s a Mary-Sue, and that’s a sign of bad writing.

“Edward himself is written as the most desirable guy on the face of the Earth. He has vampirically enhanced features that are model-perfect, even もっと見る so. It’s not just his handsome face that is described in worshipful detail, but the sound of his voice, the feel of his cold and marble-hard skin, and even the smell of his breath. Adding in the fact that he possesses super speed, super strength, immortality, and the ability to read the minds of almost everyone but Bella herself and he seems like a godly personification.”
How could I forget? Meyer reminds us almost every paragraph Edward is present. Yet again, a sign of bad writing.

He is a vampire, which means he constantly feels the desire to eat people, Bella in particular.
This is not a flaw until something bad comes of it. There is a rule in literature known as “show, don’t tell.” Now, Meyer has obviously never heard of this because we usually get either get “tell (x), 表示する nothing,” または “tell (x), 表示する (y).” While Edward constantly says he’s dangerous, wants to eat Bella, and could kill her any second, he never acts on it. If he accidentally hurt her または tried to drink her blood, I would count this as a flaw, however, he doesn’t. He always shows perfect self control.
I do not count (1) his thoughts at the beginning of Midnight Sun because that is, once again, telling, not showing, (2) him trying to drink Bella’s blood at the end of Twilight because he was trying to save her life and was able to stop very quickly, または (3) the bruises he gave Bella during their honeymoon because he destroyed furniture instead of her, and bruises are not a serious/long-term injury.

“Bella, however, continues to pursue him and he changes his mind, deciding to indulge his obsessive inclinations によって sneaking into her room at night to watch her sleep and covertly following her around, eventually seeking out a proper relationship.”
Unfortunately, the fact that Edward stalks Bella is somehow considered “romantic.” Words that come to my mind are “creepy,” “disgusting,” “sick,” “paedophilic” (he’s over 100 and she’s 17 = he’s a paedophile), etc. Take your pick.
This is an ENORMOUS flaw, and yet I feel I cannot count it. The 作者 does not consider this a flaw; therefore, it was not addressed as such. Characters need to work on their flaws throughout the book/series/movie/*insert form of storytelling here* in order for them to develop and grow. Edward doesn’t ever progress from this, as far as we know, and because this flaw doesn’t impede his character in any way (except for receiving a lot of hate from antis and members of Team Jacob), I will not count this as a flaw.

“What is attractive about Edward as a predatory vampire is, I believe, the dangerous power associated with the character and its potential to be used maliciously. There’s something enthralling about imagining myself in the position of Bella, infatuated with this dark, beautiful, and powerful man and knowing he could kill her should he lose willpower for just an instant.”
If Edward actually drank human blood I would accept this as a flaw, but since he has perfect control, this does not count.
Also, Bella is a masochist, and apparently あなた are too... I’m not entirely sure if that’s a good thing.

“Edward: And the lion fell in 愛 with the lamb.
Bella: What a stupid lamb.
Edward: What a sick, masochistic lion!”

Now, あなた may have noticed my use of the word “masochistic” in the 前 statement. It is a prime example of Stephenie Meyer’s poor 書く skills under the category us antis like to call ‘Thesaurus Rape.’
Masochism
mas•och•ism [mássə kìzzəm]
noun
1. sexual pleasure through humiliation: sexual gratification achieved through humiliation and physical and verbal abuse
2. psychological disorder: the psychological disorder in which somebody needs to be emotionally または physically abused in order to be sexually satisfied
3. 検索 for abusive sexual partners: the active seeking out of sexual partners who will dominate, humiliate, and physically and verbally abuse
4. enjoyment of hardship: the tendency to invite and enjoy misery of any kind, especially in order to be pitied によって others または admired for forbearance
Microsoft® Encarta® 2007. © 1993-2006 Microsoft Corporation. All rights reserved.

If this word was used to describe Bella, I wouldn’t even notice, however, Edward uses the word “masochistic” to describe himself. I don’t know about you, but I don’t think this is the proper 説明 of Edward, and Meyer needs to stop using big words that even she doesn’t understand.

“Jacob and Quil are not creepy pedophiles, but rather boys who feel the kind of 愛 of an older family member feels toward their young imprintees. They’re like the model babysitters and preschool teachers who seriously 愛 their kids and want to see them happy, albeit with their 愛 situated on specific people. When the kids age to the point that the average adult would find them attractive, it can be assumed that the shapeshifters will want to pursue a romantic relationship, but at that point the playing field is pretty much level and age is no longer an issue.”
This is called child grooming, and it’s a form of paedophilia.
I’d also like to point out here that Jacob would (most probably) begin having sex with Renesmee when she reaches the age of 7. Now, while あなた may argue that she looks 17, firstly, that’s a stupid argument because she’s still underage, and secondly, it’s not about how old あなた look, it’s about how many years have passed since your birth. It is still paedophilia!

“In response to the common complaint that Twilight is written poorly, I would have to say that the concept of good literature is highly subjective.”
You’re confusing “quality of writing” with “entertainment value.” Twilight is full of grammatical errors, misuse of words, dry dialogue, repetitive and long-winded descriptions, etc. This is poor writing. Now, あなた may still find entertainment in a piece which is written poorly, just as あなた can find a well written book to be completely boring; that’s how it works. Enjoying something does not mean it’s automatically good. For example, I’m addicted to the TV 表示する ‘The Secret Life of the American Teenager.’ It’s my guilty pleasure. However, as I watch, I recognise that some of the actors are substandard, the plot is full of clichés, there are many cheesy lines, and whoever is editing this together is absolutely shocking, but that doesn’t mean I can’t like it, I still find it entertaining.
There are some pieces of classic literature which bore me to tears too, because everyone enjoys different things, but the quality of the 書く is not completely dependent on the enjoyment someone gets from 読書 it; it’s based on the technical aspects of the writing. Stephenie Meyer is not a good writer, that’s not an opinion, it’s a fact.

“Finally, I have read numerous blog 記事 criticizing 作者 Stephenie Meyer’s decision to incorporate religious themes and messages into the book series.”
I don’t have a problem with religious themes and messages in a book, but once male supremacy becomes one of those values promoted, I have to draw the line.

In conclusion, I find most of the hate against Twilight running rampant on the Internet to be overblown. Surely, Twilight is not the kind of epic, involved, and progressive story like Harry Potter または Buffy the Vampire Slayer. However, for what it is, which is an intimate fantastical romance story that can be appreciated によって a large quantity of people, it is of high enough quality to achieve high popularity. This should be respected even if the story doesn’t appeal to everyone.
If everyone knows Twilight is nowhere near the standard of Harry Potter, why does Breaking Dawn have “Move over Harry Potter” printed on the back? Twilight is what it is: a cheesy paranormal romance for teens. It’s not a saga, it’s not the best 愛 story since Romeo and Juliet, it’s not well written. Now, あなた may see this “hate” as being overblown, but that’s what it looks like when lots of people all feel the same way about it, and I doubt it will stop until the Twilight fad dies down.

We're not on Team Tyler's バン for no reason.
posted by twilight-7
Enjoy!!

I ran home. I didn’t want to delay this anymore. I was already thinking of turning back and running into Edward’s waiting arms but I knew I had to do this. I had to 表示する Charlie that I wasn’t taking any of his crap. If I had to leave then I would. I got a shock when I saw his クルーザー parked at the house. I was hoping I could pack my case and write a note saying I was leaving. I didn’t really want to do it when he was there. I opened the door as quietly as I could and sneaked inside. I shut the door slowly and carefully so it didn’t creak and tip-toed across to the stairs. I...
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posted by twilight-7
This is short but I just wanted to get through it quickly. I didn't want to write it but it had to happen.


My brilliant plan that sounded absolutely brilliant wasn’t so amazing when I sat and thought about it. It seemed quite simple when I first thought of it. What was the only way Charlie would have no control over me? The answer was my mother. My plan was to go back to England, where my mother was, and Charlie could no longer have a say in what I did. Edward would follow me and he could bring his whole family to ロンドン if he wanted to. But the もっと見る I thought about it, the もっと見る I knew it...
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posted by dinosteph
End of Chapter 2

“Bella.” Edward said, nudging me.

“Wha?!” I jumped, immediately closing my eyes again. “What time is it?” I asked, referring to the bright sun that managed to find its way through the tinted windows.

“Around 10:30” He said, as he turned off the highway, down a bumpy dirt road, causing me to jump in my seat.

“This...looks...romantic..” I laughed to myself, looking out the window at the thousands of trees surrounding us.

“Well we're not there yet” He laughed to himself, taking my hand in his. “It's sorta...out of the way. I figured privacy would be important,...
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posted by H20girlH20
i woke up like at 8:09 i was walking to the kitchen. i saw Esme and Carlise. also Rosalie and Emmett. "good moring" "hi Karina how was you're sleep?" 発言しました Emmett. "fine thanks for telling me" i 発言しました "were bella and Edward also Renesemmen?" i 発言しました "well Renesemmen is in her room, and Edward and Bella are outside hunting." 発言しました Esme. i heard footsteps it was renesemmen "hi aunt Karina.!!" 発言しました renesemmen. i smiled. Esme pulled out パン "here あなた go." she 発言しました "thanks" i cried. i saw the door open it was Bella and Edward. "Bella!!!! Edward" i yelled i ran up and gave them a hug. "hi Karina."...
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As あなた know I 発言しました I did two other versions of Chapter 10. Foreveryours asked if I could post them on and I thought 'Why not?' so here it is. あなた will see some similaraties between them and Chapter 10 but あなた know I kinda merged them together to make Chapter 10. These versions will not be accounted for in the continuation of the Kayla series. They are 投稿されました on here entirely for your interest as to how things could have turned out. They both start out the same way as Chapter 10. So here it goes!

[Note: I didn't call Edward 'The Lion' until the final Chapter 10. In the vampire version he is...
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posted by twilight-7
Edward's thoughts - bold
Kayla's thoughts - italics



I had managed to make it through a whole 月 of school without anything unusual happening. The murders had seemed to stop. No one in または around Forks had been killed so maybe the newborn had learned not to kill so often または someone had dealt with it. I felt kind of disappointed that I hadn’t been able to go after it and teach it a thing または two. I think it would be quite fun battling a newborn but since it decided to stop I guess I’ll just have to wait. Edward and I continued to have our silent conversations. It was weird, him being inside...
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posted by Twilight_F
Here is chapter 11.. Sorry teh others have been short!!!! Hope あなた like it. Please read, rate, コメント and Enjoy!!!!

CHAPTER 11

Edward’s POV

I don’t know why I ran, but I did. And now that I think about it, it was one of the stupidest things I did.
I was nearly half way ホーム when I heard someone following me, so I went even faster.
“Edward, I 愛 you” She screamed. I stopped abruptly. Then I thought about it.
“Bella?” I 発言しました in my head, confused.
“I 愛 you” I felt the force that she put into it. She was struggling もっと見る than me.
I ran back and stopped about a hundred ft away from...
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posted by twilight-7
here it is!

Edward's thoughts are in bold and Kayla's in italics.



I looked at Dr Cullen, worried I had put him a difficult situation. I wanted to explain to him that he didn’t need to leave, that I wasn’t going to blab to the whole town about what he and his family were. But how could I tell him?
I looked down at the dead man on the floor. I knew that this wasn’t an animal attack. The Azdi part of me was telling me this, 表示中 me the difference between an animal attack and a vampire attack. I also knew that this was no ordinary vampire attack. It was too messy.
“Dad, I’m going outside.”...
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posted by twilight-7
So here it is, Chapter 4.



I opened my eyes and the first thing I noticed was that the pain in my head had gone. I sighed with relief and the 秒 thing I noticed was that I could count all the cracks on the ceiling. I smiled. I sat up and realised that I was on my bed. I looked at the clock and saw it was eight in the morning. I groaned and jumped out of bed. I landed lightly on my feet. I quickly threw on a clean pair of jeans and a tee shirt. I brushed my hair as fast as I could and shoved on the first pair of socks I could find. I ran downstairs and into the キッチン and found Charlie eating...
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READ BEFORE GOING ON TO CHAPTER 4!!

Ok so some of あなた were confused によって Kayla’s purpose. Do not fret. An explanation of what her purpose, why she has to protect people, and basically everything Charlie 発言しました to her is coming up now.

Kayla is an Azdi. These are a race of people that protect humans. That is there sole purpose. They protect humans from any attack によって a スーパーナチュラル being. For example, if a Nahadriah was on the loose running around like a mad man killing innocent humans, the nearest Azdi to the place where the killings were taking place would deal with the creature によって either destroying...
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posted by twilight-7
i know that it sounds like twilight a bit but i didn't know how else to get her through the day. chapter 3 coming up!!





His eyes searched mine, almost as if he was trying to read me. His eyebrows creased together and his gaze became もっと見る intense. The small dark haired girl turned around, wanting to know why her partner had let the shuttlecock fall. She followed his gaze to me and gave me a smile, 表示中 bright white teeth. He gave me one last gaze and returned to his game. I looked away from him and back to Mike who had been watching me watching the boy.
“Who’s that?” I asked, nodding at...
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As あなた can tell によって the タイトル I don't care who people prefer, to me they are completly different 本 in completly different genres- I mean would あなた ever see Ron fighting a grizzly bear. Okay so it is possible, but he isn't going to get golden eyes when he drinks it's blood, seriously?

So I decided to end this fight once and for all- although I didn't intentially come across this, I just found it on: link ,so that shows how bored あなた get to go to this extent when there's hardly any new Twilight news-right? It's a slow 日 today.

Okay so I clicked on a thing called Google Fight, and it asked...
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posted by dinosteph
For those of あなた who are new, Here is chapter 1, 2 and 3.

Chapter 1 - link

Chapter 2 - link

Chapter 3 - link




Ending of Chapter 3


It wasn't raining as much in the woods, the trees protected me from the rain. I didn't realize how cold it had gotten until I noticed the ガチョウ bumps tickle on my arms. I wrapped my arms around myself, still crying and kept walking until my legs and feet grew tired. I spotted a rock and wiped it off before I sat down. I hugged my knees close to my body.

“I can't say here. Where can I go? Renee is traveling with Phil. Would Charlie even let me leave? He wouldn't understand....
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posted by Twilight_F
Here is chapter eight. Hope あなた like it please read, rate, コメント and enjoy!!

CHAPTER 8


Bella’s POV

I cannot believe I have left him. But its for the best. He KILLED my parents. または if あなた want to put it specifically, he killed my mum and his brother (Emmett) killed my dad. And he expects me to stay with him after that. Uh-huh, right.
    I don’t know what I would have done without Sara. She really is nice, once あなた get to know her. She has taught me the ways of living as a nomadic vampire. Without her I would have been crying at the Cullens’ doorstep によって now. I don’t...
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posted by Twilight_F
Here is chapter seven. I hope あなた like it!! i got my ideas from the Twilight 本 so there are connections, but the story has got different points in it! Please read, rate and comment. Enjoy!!

CHAPTER 7

Edward’s POV

She left me. I can’t say I blame her really. I murdered her parents. But I am hurting and I didn’t think she would leave with Sara. Of all people, Sara.
    There is a huge hole in my heart, and I am struggling to keep it together. Emmett’s trying to help. But I know he feels guilty, he killed her father. I’ve heard him blaming himself. ‘Damn, why didn’t...
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posted by mikaela_isabela
third chapter, full of shocks and crazy twists...enjoy!

The La Push students stood out among the vast amounts of students at school. They were tanner, and wore brighter Colors(色) than us, a very unusual; thing to do in Forks where your covered in an unclear haze of rain and shadow. The La Push kids mostly kept to themselves, at lunch in most classes, but there would be a rare occasion that they would have to communicate with あなた for an assignment または for something they needed help with. I was lucky to be in mostly senior classes, so I didn’t have to worry about that too much. If I sounded stupid,...
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posted by mikaela_isabela
hey, for those who did my question, this is the draft of my story, of edward and jacob for bella's protection, and when they come back, she is in fact, a vampire slayer/witch (havent decided which yet!!!)
let me know if あなた like it!

Prologue

I never thought it would happen like this. The Quileute’s on my left, and the Cullen’s on my right. Both people I thought I could 愛 and trust. Both ready to kill me. I waited in weary anticipation as Edward and Jacob took two steps towards me, both looking upset yet focused at the same time. I felt my new family stir uneasily behind me, bound によって the...
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Okay guys, so I had a great idea, I'm still gonna continue 書く this story, but I always seem to never be able to make up my mind on whats going to happen..

So, what I want to do, is ask あなた guys, I 投稿されました a 質問 under "Picks" about who is behind Bella.

You guys are going to help me continue my story, and have some imput in how the story works, I'm really excited for this and think its gonna be fun!

If you're just 読書 anything from me for the first time, I would suggest going back to read all three chapters and then going under picks and selecting an option...

I think i'm gonna resort...
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This is my first fanfiction so I need あなた to be honest and tell me what あなた think!

I dont own Twilight または any of it's characters.


My mother kissed my forehead softly, “You know sweetie, あなた don’t have to do this if あなた don’t want to.” Her eyes bored into mine and for a 秒 I actually considered staying in Phoenix. But I knew Phil would be going on the road soon, and I also knew how hard it was for Renee to be away from her new husband. I didn’t want that.
“Mom for the last time I want to!” I replied, putting on the best メリダとおそろしの森 smile I could manage, smiling was just so much effort...
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posted by dinosteph
Chapter two guys.


I opened my eyes slowly, noticing the time was 5:34. Early. I closed my eyes again rolling over to my other side. I could sleep for another 時 before I had to get up and start my morning routine for school. I could hear Charlie moving around the house downstairs, probably making himself breakfast, and then I smelled burnt toast. Yup. Definitely making himself breakfast. I turned a few times trying to get comfortable when I heard the rocking chair in the corner creak. I peeked through my eyelashes holding my hand over my eyes, shielding the daylight coming in through the window....
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