Okay this is kinda my first poem....what do あなた think about it?

THE SPRING

We think to our self's 'spring is a beautiful season'
and some times we can't find the reason
Because every thing awakes from it's long sleep
and suddenly there's a leap
And every thing's never still
neither the hill
even the lake is awake
as it never was before.
Therefor i think i am mad
または some times even sad
And no one can explain
the plain feelings that in my hart always remain.

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please people be sincier! I want to know how it is to others, promise i am ready to hear any kind of coments!
Twilightkris posted 1年以上前
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im not much of a writer myself but i think it really good
Ammbarrr posted 1年以上前
 Twilightkris posted 1年以上前
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annalia said:
あなた have some real talent there! don't keep it hidden! あなた should enter a contest または something
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posted 1年以上前 
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thanks....i don't really think there's a talent thought.
Twilightkris posted 1年以上前
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i write a little too. i'll send ya something
annalia posted 1年以上前
MattxAliceNine said:
this is great!!!!
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posted 1年以上前 
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really? do あなた think so?
Twilightkris posted 1年以上前
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