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Can i get someone's opinion PLEASE

Okay I've written a story but can someone tell em if they like the story line.
A girl is 与えられた a ネックレス によって a gypsy while travelling with her family, and they find a stray dog. While driving her family has a car crash. She and the dog survive. She is taken to the hospital and while there she dicovers she can read minds and travel to a differnt world in her sleep. She figures out the ネックレス is helping her with this....jeez that was a long explanation. If あなた want a better idea, some of it is 投稿されました on here under the name Alyria. Okay I'm going to stop talking now =)
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IF あなた want to read it just type in Alyria in the 検索 box and it should come up
Free_Spirit posted 1年以上前
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It's not something I'm particularly interested in, however, あなた have a good story on your hands. Work on your grammar, and あなた may have もっと見る potential than あなた could imagine. Add some もっと見る detail, it's very vaguely described in your intro, and the story's a bit hard to grasp the concept without rereading.
j1edwardcullen7 posted 1年以上前
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cool thanks for the critism, alot of people don't give critism afraid of hurting people. And we might run into a few grammar problems =)
Free_Spirit posted 1年以上前
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oh and I'll also desrcibe it もっと見る for people. Thanks
Free_Spirit posted 1年以上前
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lilred96 said:
yeah sure i would 愛 too read もっと見る but can あなた send me a link to the first chap?
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posted 1年以上前 
sweet_n_silly said:
i think it sounds pretty good
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posted 1年以上前 
Aisuanime said:
Sounds good, and unique.
Post the 質問 on the 書く club and a lot of people would view and answer X)
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posted 1年以上前 
j1edwardcullen7 said:
My answer's a コメント ^.
Mine's similar. It's about a girl who died twice and is now like the grim reaper, where she claims lives in her sleep, によって becoming the person - and doesn't know how to control it. :D
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posted 1年以上前 
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cool can i have a link to your story?
lilred96 posted 1年以上前
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