OK, I know my 前 fanfictions pretty much suck, so... Give me some feedback, please. I think that this site is dead. :( Also, I have a new-ish OC. Let me know if I get any facts off.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white コート フード tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to 表示する the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do あなた have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black フード pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do あなた have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She 発言しました in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya または something." "Aslyxia, あなた pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up によって me for the story.)
~Five 分 Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because あなた are older and male, あなた can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are あなた cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the シート, 座席 as I lean against the ウォール of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her フード off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I スイング my legs off the シート, 座席 and sit normally. "I hope あなた are a good partner, Edward. I can discard あなた from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered によって this. He shoots back, "What do あなた have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I walked through Central, heading to the Command Center. I pulled my black and white コート フード tighter over my head. I held out my trademark pocketwatch to 表示する the guards I was a State Alchemist. I went into Roy's office. A golden-haired boy sat on the couch. He turned to look at me as I walked in. I said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do あなた have for me? And who is the boy?"
《Ed's P.O.V.》
I turned as a person walked in. She looked no older than me. She had a black フード pulled over her head, a white stripe going down it. She also wore black jeans and brown boots. Her hands were covered with light gray gloves. Her hair was brown from what I could tell, and a dyed ponytail cascaded over her shoulder. Her eyes were two different colors, the right being deep blue and the left one red.. She said, "Hello, Colonel Mustang. What do あなた have for me? And who is the boy?" I stood up. "I'm Edward Elric, the Fullmetal Alchemist." She 発言しました in the same quiet voice, "I am Audrey Himura, Nightmare Alchemist. Anyways," she turned back to Roy. "What's the case?"
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
Roy sighed. "There's a grave-robber in another town. Find out who it is, the motive, and bring him back." I nodded. "Alright. What is the name of the town?" "Uh, Aslya または something." "Aslyxia, あなた pyromaniac." (A/N: Aslyxia is made up によって me for the story.)
~Five 分 Later~
I walked out with this Edward Elric guy. I asked, "How old are you?" He blinked and answered with a confused expression. "15..." I nod. "I am 13. Don't think because あなた are older and male, あなた can boss me around." "I wasn't planning to." I begin walking. "Let's go to the train station. I want to leave as soon as possible." He followed me.
~Train~
I sit down, zipping my coat. Ed looks out the window. I pull a book out and start reading. I shiver, which Ed notices. "Are あなた cold?" I look at him. "No. I'm fine." I pull my legs onto the シート, 座席 as I lean against the ウォール of the train. I turn the page, whispering as I read.
《Ed's P.O.V.》
This girl seemed weird. She hadn't taken her フード off and it wasn't cold at all. I wonder why she shivered then... I sigh and look out the window at the scenery as the train rushes along. Audrey is engrossed in the book so I don't bother her.
《Audrey's P.O.V.》
I closed the book and put it back in my bag. "Ah... I need to call Nori-sensei..." I スイング my legs off the シート, 座席 and sit normally. "I hope あなた are a good partner, Edward. I can discard あなた from my life as simply a person throws away a piece of trash." He looks angered によって this. He shoots back, "What do あなた have against me? We just met, what did I do wrong?" I scowl. "It is not merely you, Edward. It's everyone."
I'm going to make fanfic 記事 with my avatar: Vengeance. This is about her. Please enjoy. :D
Name: Vengeance <her actual name is unknown>
Age: 13
Alchemy: Metal, Chains, Ice, Air
State Alchemist Name: Feral Alchemist
Age When Became A State Alchemist: 8
Appearance: Brown hair with no bangs that is pulled into a ponytail that is dyed blue green, dark blue eyes, the same ジャケット Ed wears but is light gray, light gray gloves, black jeans, brown knee length boots. She wears a sword sheath on her back that has alchemical powers.
Bio: She was 7 when her mother, father, and two brothers were killed. She tried to bring them back and ロスト her left leg to the knee, part of her right side and her right arm to the shoulder.
Name: Vengeance <her actual name is unknown>
Age: 13
Alchemy: Metal, Chains, Ice, Air
State Alchemist Name: Feral Alchemist
Age When Became A State Alchemist: 8
Appearance: Brown hair with no bangs that is pulled into a ponytail that is dyed blue green, dark blue eyes, the same ジャケット Ed wears but is light gray, light gray gloves, black jeans, brown knee length boots. She wears a sword sheath on her back that has alchemical powers.
Bio: She was 7 when her mother, father, and two brothers were killed. She tried to bring them back and ロスト her left leg to the knee, part of her right side and her right arm to the shoulder.