アルファ＆オメガ Article: Runt's secret chapter 5:my arm

posted by Rockowolf123

Runt slowly got his sences back he did not know were he was
he smelled blood,drugs,and sick people
he found that he was in the hospial
the pack had advanced alot in technology
runt couldent feel his arm
your ok" stinky exclamed
what happend"runt asked
あなた um あなたロスト your arm" stinky studderd
what"runt 発言しました looking at his arm
he saw a steel arm were his used to be
there is some one who wants to see you"stinky said
it was tasha runts girlfreind
Runt your ok" Tasha said
yeah if ok is a missing fucking arm" runt 発言しました getting up
um Tasha i wanna know if um" runt ロスト is words
what is it" tasha 発言しました in her french accent (she was french not like marcel i meen real french)
will あなた um marrie me"runt 発言しました the thing he wanted to say sence he met tasha 4 years 前
yes i have been waiting for あなた to say that" tasha said

the end for now
its really short but it is important

mmmzone Please forgive me if I come off as rude, for that is not my intent. I have to say that you seriously need to work on your writing skills. The way you put these sentences together makes me think you just typed this up in less than five minutes or you are early in elementary school. I can barely understand what you are saying and therefore I have no idea what this story was about. When it comes to writing you have to sit down and re-read your work every time and make sure there are no spelling and grammatical errors so its easy for your readers to understand. Again, not trying to be rude, but I'm surprised nobody has said anything. Keep working at it though, you'll get there.

AlphaClub Nice dude. Is this the one you wanted me to look at?